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MysticalAngel7 Junior Member
since 2001-02-24
Posts 20 |
Deceiving love Careless and blind True to my heart My emotions unwind Mystical Mysteries His being and beyond His life and his stories Nothing can go wrong With a curious feeling Is there something there? Am I the love of your life? Do you really care? All the answers Hidden away Locked behind your eyes Released simply by day You have qualities From heaven above Something draws me To your lasting love For your feelings To be honest and true I feel that one day I could fall in love with you! Ded. to my one true love.. Andrew Neither the angels in heaven above,Nor the demons down under the sea,can ever dissever my soul from the soul, of the beautiful Annabel Lee -E.A.Poe |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Mystical Angel: Nice poem. The second stanza was quite well-written, especially that alliteration at the beginning of it. I liked your rhyming as well, and also the compactness of the lines. This format of writing with single line sentences and ideas seems to be quite popular... |
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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA |
this was awsome i really liked it it shows true emotion keep it up! The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
The style you used in this piece was pure classic. For some reason, romantic poetry is more effective when kept to such a simple rhyme scheme. If I read this in a card at the store, I'd buy the card and ~then~ think of someone to give it to.  Very well done. -Allan Just 'cause we have a legion of undead minions to do our bidding and rule the earth from a pair of thrones built of gold and bone doesn't make us bad |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
great way to put your sentiments into writing hope things get better for you thanks for the read keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very sweet poem here. Glad to see you happy  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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