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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
after the emotional drain i just had i really dont feel like talking. if the poem reads like crap, thats how i feel. so it served its purpose. -=heros downfall=- chaos reigns supreme over the castle dementia. demons cry a maniacal laugh while the knight holds his wound. shake the sand off your shoulders and move the boulders the fight includes you but the knight is all out. angels from the skies come to fight and raise the knight they do. if only he could sacrifice himself, for the better cause. -San San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
San: I liked the extended metaphor you used here. I hope that your situation improves soon. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
It is not good that you have been emotionally drained but you do come up with the most fabulous pieces when you have got nothing left. I love this piece and I really mean love it. I hope the situation improves for you too. ~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
nice nice... sad to hear bout that, but you always write good nevertheless JR When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself... |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Heyaz. Good good good. Good content, good words, good thoughts, good good good. Thank you very very much for posting.  This smiley is soo cooooooool hahaha.~Carly "Nature is not only all that is visible to the eye--it also includes the inner pictures of the soul." ~Edvard Munch |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Not bad, San. I like the ending. Nice to see you back. How is the graphics stuff doing? Best of luck, man. -Allan The unintelligent are merely tools for the intelligent. That would make my house a veritable toolshed. ~~Allan Riverwood |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hey San --- hope things get better for ya be strong So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. [This message has been edited by acire (edited 02-24-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Felipe, I got it all.....and no.....I won't tell you........EVER!!!!!! Anyway nice poem. I know why you wrote it and when.....so I won't say anything. Haha no, i know you hate when I do that. Ok well.....I liked the ending of it...quite nice.....I like the angels, are they naked? OOooooooo nicely done here, not yer best....get over it....but still a great poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
as i said. i dont think this was a good poem. never said it was. actually the part on top of it tells you that it sucks to my opinion. so SHH! and dope i am over it, you know that. so SHH!  haha.fun. ill be more active next week, san is back. San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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