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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA 
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-=i think maybe this is a continuation of my last poem...our love was never meant to be These tears I cry, blurring my vision invading my thoughts, weakening my heart I thought I could stay strong but it's as if my whole world's fallen apart I can't do this without you maybe I lied when I said I'd be alright I keep telling myself that I'm fine but my heart seems to be winning the fight What is wrong with me?? This was for the best, we both agreed I took our time for granted and baby im sorry because now you're the only thing I need Why does that stupid saying have to be true "You dont know what you've got till its gone" I'm trying to move on, I really am but YOU seem to be on my mind from dusk till dawn. Can we re-think our decision just once because I cant end this not regretfully you're the one I want, you're the one i need you're the one I love, and you mean so much to me ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
I know EXACTLY how you feel here... I lost someone I loved dearly not so long ago and I wanted soooo much to be back with them... for weeks I cried cause all I wanted was them... but trust me... you need to move on... I know that is easy for me to say... but I have been there and I know how hard it is... Just my suggestion... This is a great peice and I hope you can work things out soon!! Melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Very touching piece, these emotions are never a good thing to feel, but can be a great thing to write. Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I'm sorry, this sitch sucks. However, it does get better, the feeling of yearning, wanting, it fades. If it wasn't meant to be, unfortunatly, all of the tears in the world won't heal it. I hope you feel better....just remember "No guy is worth your tears, and the one who is, would never make you cry." Good luck, and keep writing!! xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
ouch, very sadening poem. I'd tell you to try and just forget about it all and dettach yourself from it, but girls tend to be more emotional, not to sound sexist or anything like that, in fact it sometimes hard for me to take my own advice. Don't mean to sound sexist or cold or anything, anyways it was a really great poem and you imparted all those emotions to everyone who read it so it's a wonderful piece. ok I had to clear it up now that I thought about it, girls aren't any more emotional than guys but guys just seem to deny it alot more...there that sounds better doesn't it? < !signature--> >¶Øʆ< [This message has been edited by Poet on Acid (edited 01-14-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Damn well I know how this feels completely. I've been through that a few times with the SAME GIRL! Yea ok.....so I've only had 1 gf......sue me....she was worth my pain and heartache. nice poem here........good luck.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I think I'm just gonna keep my mouth shut Hope you start feeling better sweets I really hope you do I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Well great poem I always can relate to them which I don't know if thats a good or bad thing. But anyway I'll talk to you soon keep up the great work. Lauren |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
wow.. great poem, you're words are so meaningful... I bet you could write for a boy/girl band  Well.. I hope that you can cope with these feelings.. and writing more only helps! ~JDR< !signature--> "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde [This message has been edited by jeremydraul (edited 01-15-2001).] |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Really good one, I know where you're coming from. These lines really got to me: "Why does that stupid saying have to be true "You dont know what you've got till its gone" I'm trying to move on, I really am but" Really strong words. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Hun i am so sorry your in such pain...break ups are tough and it leaves you feeling alone and lost...its one of the worst feelings in the world and im so sorry it has happened to you. Please try and feel better... |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
They all have replied saying great things, I just want to add excellent job on this poem < !signature--> "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com [This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 01-17-2001).] |
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