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Inevitability You see
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
The harder you combat the deeper you fall you start to immerse into gravitates call and when you ultimately realize It is already much to late you can by now foresee your fate Your over head you grip with your feet but it devours you and are inadequate to beat. The sand commences surpassing you until you no longer can see thereupon you discern this is your inevitability. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Nice, but depressing for personal reasons. ~_^ I liked it. Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
title was great really liked the thought here beautiful work ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Allan~ I am sorry that this poem is depressing to you it is to me for personal reason also. I just had to "try" to get it out. Sorry you had to read it. |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
This is great angel... you have written this soo well that I don't know what else to say... great work!! Melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Jeremy ~I am very very happy you thought that this was beautiful. you just lifted my spirits thank you Melz~ lol.Thank you [This message has been edited by Angel in Flight (edited 01-13-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Good job on this poem. Hope things get better.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I think I see where you are coming from We view life pretty much in a similar way if you go thru my last poems in TP#3, youll see what i mean it doesnt depress me though cause ive accepted the fact that my life is this keep em coming I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Acrie~ i am going to look at your poerty like you have said in some way i feel like you might be right about our views. I'll tell you what i think when i finish reading your poems. Thank you |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
well I would say it is depressing as well but I'm always at a constant level of some sort of depression so it really doesn't phase me. The poem was great though. Very discriptive. But as always all your poems are great. >¶Øʆ< |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I really like the way you wrote this, great job on it! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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