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Technological Dance (Goes out to the Dancers)
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Technological Dance (Goes out to the Dancers) |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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Eh, I know its weak... shoot me. ‘Technological Dance’ Bass beating abruptly Through thickness of mind Strobe and lights flicker As groups are entwined Arms flaring out To the rhythm of sound Bodies beating fast With neons all around Slick steps of dance Collaborate the crowd Area of acrobatics Circle in the clouds Us, body to body Dashingly dancing on We won’t think to stop ‘Til the techno's gone Jeremy D Raulinaitis When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself... |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Music can have an amazing affect on all of us, but it must be 10 times more for dancers. You describe it well. Thanks for posting.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
aww a tribute to the dancers  Awesome..i for one would die without music, its such a huge part of my life with dance and all, thanks for the poem *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Ahh yeah..I love this feeling. There is nothing like techno shooting through you at a rave. This is going to the library Jer. The memories it brings back is pretty damn sweet. ~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Let's all go clubbin  Let's start here in Chicago We got THE clubs So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Let's all go clubbin Let's start here in Chicago We got THE clubs So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Great poem. I haven't been here in a while so you might not remember me. I hope you keep up the good work. "True friends stab you in the front" "Never say 'I Love You' unless you mean it" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought that this was just fine cept you need some punctuation because the reader doesn't know when to stop or keep going. Other than that, good.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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