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The Final Goodbye
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The Final Goodbye |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
The Final Goodbye For months the struggle, Exceeded the depths of coping. Locked in the shadows of pain, Her anger was disguised by moping. Her eyes changed so much, Once so full now too dark. Embedded in chains of loss, The features lost their spark. Sobbing she kisses the ground, Blames no one for what is done. The strings that loosely held her together, Have now finally become undone. Swimming in a sea of sorrows, White ships float near by, One after another the consumption is complete, For this is her Final Goodbye. ------- Take it as you will. The meaning may be different to each individual. ~AnonymousFemale~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha [This message has been edited by anonymousfemale (edited 02-22-2001).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hey, hang in there girl don't loose hope actually, never loose hope your poem's emotions make me worry for you be strong ok? keep your head up So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
Hey this is wicked good! i hope that this is not too personal because i think that you are a very strong person and you can make it through anything and nothing will ever be your last goodbye. hang in there!  ~*Valerie*~ *Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes* |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Acire, don't worry for me. Sugar, everything I write directly relates to me. Otherwise I don't write. Thanks for the replies guys. ~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
AF, this was really good. I liked it very very much. Don't let go. ~Carly "Nature is not only all that is visible to the eye--it also includes the inner pictures of the soul." ~Edvard Munch |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
WOW I REALLY LIKED THIS. IM GONNA PRINT IT OUT GREAT JOB, KEEP IT UP*DQ ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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litle_krazy_poet Member
since 2001-01-17
Posts 71 |
wow this poem was grate. i lived this ove the past couple of days i really liked it thanks for shairing i write poems all the time and i post them for all of you. some times i write 4or 5 a day and then sometimes just one and i post the one that i like |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
are you leaving passions? I hope not! what a splendid poem tho! JR When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself... |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Great poem, full of emotions that I can relate to.Stay strong! jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Thanks for the replies everyone. Jer, if I was going somewhere, I'd let another human being know. ~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done here, and I knew you couldn't leave passions....you love ME too much hehe. But hey, I love you too!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Aw yeah you're right Dopes. How could I leave my Riverdance rival? ~AF~ "Love makes us poets and the approach of death should make us philosophers." ~ George Santayana |
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Starr Member
since 2001-02-08
Posts 100 |
BEAUTIFUL!!!! Absolutely beautiful... Love the strong emotions... but hope your're coping with this as best as possible. Keep thinking positive never look back.... Always look ahead.... forward is always better especially in this situation... Good post. Love it!! Every action of our lives touches some chord that will vibrate in eternity. |
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