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a poem |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
Run with me through the night, Get beyond belief and out of sight, Move to a place deep in your mind, Where everyone and everything is left behind, Constrate on this problems that are not with greeve, For all of these things we don't really need, Free yourself free your mind, Do all you can so not to be left behind, Left behind, lonely place just to be, No way to live, No way to be free, Men live lives with lies so thick, That you couldn't hurt them even if you used a brick, So in the end time will tell, Of who goes to heaven and who goes to hell Lead me not into temptation, I can find the way there mysel |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
this was good..i like  Keep it up*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
sounds like a song, nice job bro work on the title a bit! JR When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself... |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
That was realy good Jay! I really liked it! keep it up..and I agree with Jeremy..work on the title ~*~SCG~*~ |
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cutie2005 Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 148Bennett, Colorado USA |
Nice poem!! Good job!! I've expericend this hehe!! I really liked it.. Hope to hear more!! Luv yas, cutie If you love someone you would go to the end of the world for them! |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
my mind was dead at the time and besides I am terrible at thinking up titles Lead me not into temptation, I can find the way there mysel |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
wonderful post jytree great peening of beliefs and thoughts thanks for the read keep sharing So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Ooooooo Aaaaaaa again Ooooooo Aaaaaaa Great job here jytree!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
lol at dopey that was oringal Lead me not into temptation, I can find the way there mysel |
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Starr Member
since 2001-02-08
Posts 100 |
Nice poem!! Like it a lot. Though the name.... well you understand... Good writing... Every action of our lives touches some chord that will vibrate in eternity. |
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