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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas 
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I stand by and watch you cry The bitter words of hate have tore your life apart As each tear falls you hate the "man" you call more and more I feel helpless against this rage of emotions and problems It sickens me to stand by and watch his unkind words tear at your self-esteem Your mother was caught for 18 years by the claws of deceit and lies Only now as she is set free He takes you as his next victim How I want to save you, my friend, from all your trouble and greif I stand by and I too cry.  |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well whatever seems to be going on in this poem it's bad......I'm sorr you and yer friend are going through this.......could you elaborate as to what exactly is happening?  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
Sure. My best friend that lives right next to me is having a rough time. Her parents (after 18 years of mental and physcial abuse) are getting a devorice. Well tonight I answered the door and she was standing there crying. Her father called over to my house....After about 15 minutes of her tearful screams and fighting with her dad, he told her to come home. I was so enraged and upset that I sat down and wrote this....and this is what I wrote. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ouch. Hope that all is well. Great poem, btw. At least we get this as a product of unfortunacy. -Allan The unintelligent are merely tools for the intelligent. That would make my house a veritable toolshed. ~~Allan Riverwood |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
This is a really strong poem... I really liked the emotion behind it... it's goin' in the library thank ya very much.  Just hope ur problem gets better. "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
How come some of the best poems come out of the worst pain and tradgedy? It just doesn't seem right for some reason. I mean, if all of you objectively go through all your poems, what will the happy/sad ratio be? I know that at least 98% of my poems are filled with pain, and I don't think that's right. Is it easier to write poetry when we're sad or hurting? Awesome poem, and I sincerely hope that things will work out for everyone who is involved.  Rhonda "I am Canadian" - Joe "When I find the right guy for me, I'll love him no matter what he does or what he's like" [This message has been edited by Skyfire (edited 02-19-2001).] |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Oh, I know exactly where you're coming from. My best friend is always getting crap. I hate it, I've written poems about her before. I have one ont he board now about her. Pain makes for great art I suppose, profound happiness always seems like a dream, because it's so rare among us. It's a shame. "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I hope your friend is doing better now. She is very lucky to have someone like you by her. So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
i think that sometimes it's easier for us to write when we are hurt. no matter what kind of torture anyone goes thru feeling the pain is the same no matter what. and when people are happy, or un-hurting, there are different levels. someone can be un-pained and not be ecstatic..they could just be in the middle.. see? but if i were your friend i'd be happy as hell to have such a great friend like you. way to stick by her...  Valerie *Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes* |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
Thanks for your replays, everyone. It does seem easier to write out of sadness. Maybe because our sadness makes happiness seem more real. |
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