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ixteme Junior Member
since 2001-02-14
Posts 10 |
You are my love the love of my life i see myslef with only you the rest of my life i wait around for you to say i love you now go away i shed my tears everyday sooner or later they'll go away tell me the truth dont tell me to stay u say u love me everyday u say u love me but dont want to see me im finding out this is a mistake i confess my love to an empty soul to hear a lie from a fool do u love me? i do love you do u wanna see me id love to see you i dont know what what to belive anthing thing uve ever said to me my broken heart lies beneath over there under your feet i cant seem to get over thee my one true love kendal i mean |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This is cute. You aren't too bad, just keep posting and reading and you will improve with time. The important thing is to take your time. This forum is a great place for improving your poetry! I'll give you some advice, it is the same that I give everyone. Try putting restrictions to yourself, like rhyme or syllable schemes. It makes you search for more creative words to fit the situation. Best of luck, and welcome to Passions! -Allan When the sun dies, and the earth is thrown off its axis, the two of us will still, at that moment, be thinking of one another. ~~Allan, to Amanda |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! We're glad that you've decided to join our family of poets here in Passions for Poetry. I speak for everyone when I say you are most welcome and we hope that you do enjoy your stay. Looking forward to seeing more of you poems. ps. pls check your email So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
you are too good at this. great first post..poem's are just emotions on paper, you cant go wrong, so dont ever let anyone tell you differently. keep it up, i hope to see more posts by you *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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ixteme Junior Member
since 2001-02-14
Posts 10 |
man i didnt know anyone could be as nice as you guys have been...i think i have some more poems laying at the bottom pit of my heart waiting to be released... peace pete oh yea check out my band www.angelfire.com/rock2/ixteme |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Saw the site dude, very very nice. So you're the drummer eh? Well I play electric guitar....I'll be in a band within the year. I can't get in one any time soon cuz i'll be heading off to college in the states soon. Anyway Nicely done here on the poem. Hope to see you post more.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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ixteme Junior Member
since 2001-02-14
Posts 10 |
thanks for visiting the site..thanks for the compliments peace pete |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
 Welcome to Passions I think your poem is good, please post some more for us. We're more than willing to read them. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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