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Jeremy's Haiku Challenge - "life"
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Jeremy's Haiku Challenge - "life" |
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LucidityNow Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 118Canada |
Hey Jeremy, that picture really gave me alot of ideas. So here goes... Lonley, Shivering Although with your great beauty You do not belong and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me... [This message has been edited by LucidityNow (edited 02-14-2001).] |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Certainly a different way of looking at things. Challenge well met!  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
There are a lot of ideas that can come into one's mind from a single image, and you've penned this one well. Great job  !"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
good job...you did well So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
yeah, I'll ditto Acire. It's good to see you used words with multiple syllables. It is difficult to make a decent senryu/haiku utilizing multi-syll words proficiently enough. -Allan When the sun dies, and the earth is thrown off its axis, the two of us will still, at that moment, be thinking of one another. ~~Allan, to Amanda |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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