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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
A dark and cold stinging rain Always used to bring pain It brings about a deafening silence That appears just before the violence Prolonged exposure to this rain may cause loss of life Then a new rain comes to wash away All the pain and the sorrow of that day A soft rain and a cleansing rain as well Washing all the hate back down into hell Watering down the confusion and the strife Uhm, not my best, not my worst, just somethin to read. There are no mention of people here so I hope this isn't taken as a suicidal thing. The loss of life part really has nothing to do with humans. Enjoy? >¶Øʆ< |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
interesting rhyming scheme on the end of the stanzas good job on this one POA So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. [This message has been edited by acire (edited 02-14-2001).] |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a wonderful piece, full of hope and beauty. You have really impressed me with this one. The writing style is also excellent. Thanks for sharing it with us.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done here acid. I liked this one......not yer best, but most certainly far from your worse.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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