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what is love? |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
“What is love?” Is it in the heart or in the soul? What is the point the final goal Is it of the spirit or of the mind? And why must it be so hard to find If there is beginning is there an end If there is does ones heart mend A simple yet painful grief Stealing ones soul like a thief Giving the illusion of perfection Bleeding the soul without detection >¶Øʆ< |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Capturing the definition for love is something not easily done. I agree with you that it is both a negative and positive emotion. I like the way that you wrote this piece. -Allan Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey, I really liked this. Your style is really cool, it shows independence and a certain shabazz. Keep posting. ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
nice one and nice style! good luck. ~lotsa luv "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" |
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Baby Gansta Junior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 24 |
A well thought out poem and very interesting too, keep up the good work. But I guess we'll all know love when we find it. |
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Bright_Eyes Junior Member
since 2000-12-22
Posts 29Plymouth, MN |
Sometimes it's hard to describe love, but I think you did a wonderful job. My favorite line was "stealing ones soul like a thief." Nice job! |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
"A simple yet painful grief Stealing ones soul like a thief Giving the illusion of perfection Bleeding the soul without detection" I belive that was the strongest part.. and it concluded the poem nicely Well done on "what is love?" hope to read more best wishes ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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CareBear3 Junior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 39New Hampshire |
First off I really like that symbol in your signature......does that stand for something? And second this was a beautiful poem, capturing lifes biggest question is hard to do, but you did, well might i add! Great job. "In great moments life seems neither right nor wrong but something greater it seems inevitable" ~Kelley |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
great, thanx for the feedback everyone, as for my 'style' i try not to confine myself to any certain form or pattern, I find the emotions and ideas are better served when i just let them flow directly to the paper. and about my signature, I not sure which symbol your talking about I just wanted somethin other than conventional letters...anyways thanx again everyone. >¶Øʆ< |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was nice. Love.....love is all that matters.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wow, great job on this one! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
that was Grrrrrrrrrrrrrreat!! You have written well... keep 'em coming!! Melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Bump... >¶Øʆ< |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
wow -"Poet Nascitar, Non Fit" |
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