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A wound that will never heal
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A wound that will never heal |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
looks like I won't be leaving YET, until the moderators decide to kick me out I'll keep on posting. As far as I know (not that I know anything I only WROTE the poem) there is nothing suicidal about this poem. This has to do with love not death. (note those tend to be the only things I write about for the most part) anyways please help me with a title? Enjoy A cold sword piercing the heart Blood slowly dripping down to the ground These wounds are so stealthy could have been caused by a dart A cure to such pain may never be found The pain that becomes greater day by day It consumes the heart the mind and the soul This is one wound time will not pass away No one can see as it secretly takes its toll The blood from this wound meets the eye in the form of tears Wounds of the heart and the emotion The scars will still be seen even after the years From wounds caused like this, from the lose of devotion >¶Øʆ< [This message has been edited by Poet on Acid (edited 02-11-2001).] |
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pixiechild Junior Member
since 2001-02-02
Posts 35 |
all u'r poems is so deep...but yet so beautiful. What about the title "a wound that will never heal" just a thought. keep on writing and hopefully u don't hav to leave.  pix |
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pixiechild Junior Member
since 2001-02-02
Posts 35 |
sorry for second reply...what about "a wound so cold....." pix |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
i agree with pix, a wound that never heals or wahtever she said LOL that would be a good one. i love this poem. definitely goin in my library!! *Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes* |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Deep, beautiful, raw honesty, bold imagery and emotions....I like. I have no ideas for a title. Just pick a cool word and go with it. That's what I do.  I am no one if not myself. Angel of Darkness |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
WONDERFUL JOB,POA!!!! Into the Library you go. Keep posting and the moderators better let you stay with us here. We truly NEED you!! Love aways ~ Amanda Keep searching, we are here, you only have to find us.~ Amanda |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Go poet, go poet, it's yer birfday, its yer...Ok no. Man, this poem kicked some serious booty..Gave me shivers..and wow, what's this? No suicide images? Crazy! I do picture someone torturing a man's heart. Great stuff. ~Carly "Insane people are always sure that they are fine. It is only the sane people who are willing to admit that they are crazy." (Nora Ephron) |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done on this one acid. I surely hope they don't kick you out any time soon.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
if they do kick you out, thanks for all your posts and replies. lovely poem here, im sure we've all had these feelings before...very well written bro Jeremy "I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.) |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Nice job on the poem, and I hope they don't kick you out "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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