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When I see you
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
When I see you I see your amazing smile Your cute Face How tAll and skinny you are They way you aLways look so good And how you're aLways there How carIng and sweet you are Your smile shiNing from afar Your gLeaming green eyes Laughing with yOur friends HOw you saVe each and every moment When I sEe you |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
Okay, its a little out of whack, but I did my best. :o) |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I don't think it's out of whack at all I thought it flowed really good I guess you really like this person a lot pretty obvious after the read  thanks for sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
You really enjoy this acrostic-esque style don't you? I have never really seriously done one of these. Very well done, Angelbee. -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done here. I liked this one a lot. Hope to see more of this style because I find it to be creative. A message within a message.......  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like this one, nice job  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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