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Once Before
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apsara Member
since 2000-11-09
Posts 70 |
Once Before I saw you once before In another lifetime But I'm really not sure I saw you once before I didn't think we'd meet again And now I don't know what we're here for I saw you once before A face in the crowd, leaving no impression Now you're the one that I adore I saw you once before A lonesome figure under the streetlight But that was back in 1944 |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hmmmmmm I thought the poem was nice. The ending kinda confused me.......anyway I liked it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
this is really cool! i like it. i love the ending how it kinda throws you off. keep it up. ~kate~ |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Nice twist! I like it |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Do you believe in past lives? It is an interesting concept! I must admit that.... Interesting poem!  xoxo Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
pretty cool that would make you a lot older than us if you did live in 1944 but i really liked the whole topic -Jeremy "I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.) |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i love the ending. I never thought you'd put it all the way back to 1944. Great write, keep sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Okay, this poem was very interesting and different from what I usually see in here. In a very good way. It was almost suspenseful for me, I'm not sure why. Going back to 1944... I'm really not sure what the signifigance of this is. Could be a past life you mean, could be a metaphorical or non-literal sense, or you could be a bit old for a Teen forum. Either way, excellent poem. One for the library. -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
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