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The Glorious Pyramid
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The Glorious Pyramid |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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Well well, I'm back to myself for this poem. A wonderful poem about prevailing and thriving... I hope you enjoy! "The Glorious Pyramid" Pride within your soul Permits your prevalence It drives towards goals And shows willful sense Live alongside the verge And keep spirits towered Feel the intensifying surge As heart remains powered Lurch with the daring And leap with reliance Success will be appearing As you flirt with defiance Keep the head so steady And glance upon the prize You’ll know your ready When you loiter with the wise! -J.D. Raulinaitis "I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.) |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Great poem, Jer! Lots of good advice, as always. I love it! A lot of people could really learn something from what you have to say in here. Never stop amazing us, Jeremy. -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Jeremy, You don't know how much i needed this today. I hope you do not mind if i keep this one for a while until i get over my bump in the road. Wonderful and simply amazing... what else can I say.. Your work has truly moved me, and I thank you and truthfully wish to see much more of your work in the near future. Thank you for sharing this prized piece. ~ Destiny~ "Amanda" ps. dont ask about the name thing. Thanks O:o) [This message has been edited by Angel in Flight (edited 02-01-2001).] |
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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
Jeremy I loved how you described how one should look at their goal, desire or even a dream it differs for every reader, but for me I thought of it as a positive way of looking at a goal that one wants to accomplish great piece! |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
excellent return to writing by yourself i'd say.. a great uplifting post.. great work! "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Oh yay!!... I didn't have to select my little icon thing... it remembered!!! :> Wow Jeremy... good to see your back... no more tricking us, K? This is great as ussual.  Jason ps lol at this  "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 02-03-2001).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
combination of wise sayings here you might be the American Monk  lol j/k hey, evertime I see your poem, I can't wait to read it...you've prgressed so much keep sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I'll tear this to pieces....THIS SUCKED BIG GIANT HORSE BOOTY!......ok no im playin hehehe.....this was actually VERY good jer. I thought it rocked. I liked the whole scheme and flow of it all, very nicely written. Oh and everybody.....I couldn't help laughing like a pothead when I saw what Isgona wrote at the very bottom....his LOL about that little face. I saw that yesterday and thought to myself "that looks quite sexual"........hahahahaha Oh my God, I'm crying.....it's so funny... *regains composure* ok my bad....  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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the day i tried to live Junior Member
since 2001-02-03
Posts 27the seventh circle |
i see, said the blind monkey... or perhaps i do not see after all... the form is excellent (particularly for a teen -- not that teens can't master form, just that most of them don't even bother to try) and the ideas (though seemingly elusive of a common overarching idea) are well thought-out and well expressed... bravo |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
This was really good! Glad it's you again... hehe LOL at Dopey and Isgona.... sickos!! xoxo Jenn  "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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