Standing on the edge of destruction

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Teen Poetry #4

Standing on the edge of destruction

Hardkore
Junior Member

since 2001-01-31

Posts 33
San DIego, California

0 posted 2001-02-01 09:46 PM

Standing on the Edge of Destruction

A life filled
With so much strife
Spawns transparent thoughts
Of a better life

I must fight for
My own existence
Alone and weak
In life I seek
Happiness!

I stand on the
Edge of destruction

Thoughts and Ideals
Lost in time
Time it took to
Come to the realization
That all you knew
Was just a sick illusion

Derived to save society
From persecution

I stand on the
Edge of destruction

Passion fuels my love
Passion becomes consumed by my love
Without my love I become passionless

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-02-01 09:58 PM

Very nicely written here. I like how the poem is composed. Thoughts were very well put down and flowed quite nicely. I liked thisone a lot.......hopefully the edge extends itself a bit farther from you.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-02-01 10:00 PM

And if not, push it.
Good poem.
-Allan

We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

3 posted 2001-02-02 09:52 AM

I love hte way your poem was constructed. It's simplicity is what gives it's own depth. You're very talented, that I can see, so keep posting. Thanks for the read

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

4 posted 2001-02-02 09:30 PM

I know how that feels. I was just standing on such an edge not too long ago. Sometimes it's good to just have faith that all will unfold as it should. It is madening when you come to the realization that so much of society is an illusion.

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

5 posted 2001-02-02 10:05 PM

Cool piece. Sometimes you need to take a step back from that edge and see why you're really there. Nice poem.

xoxo
Jenn

"I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia

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