Teen Poetry #4 |
memories of you....... |
~unwanted~ New Member
since 2000-11-23
Posts 7²h꣣ |
In a locked room I keep my memories Memories of you A box of pictures Of you Of me Me and you together Small cards Saying the sweetest words That made me smile Touched my heart Forever And I love you Stars I remember being in your arms Looking in your eyes Never once wanting to look away Under the stars we laid Dreaming sweet dreams Of me and you Together forever Some dreams come true And others I guess... Are meant to stay dreams Love I try Not to think of how you made me feel I don't want to remember that I still love you I don't want to see that I care I don't want to look at the blue roses You never forgot They were my favorite Wilting in my room From you A small card saying, "I love you" Hate I want to hate you For leaving me Leaving me here all alone Hate you for loving her For not loving me Resent I resent each time you hold her Hold her like you held me Resent each kiss you place on her lips Kiss her like you kissed me Jealousy Jealous of her Of each, "I love you" You whisper sweetly in her ear The red roses You lay in her hands And not mine Missing I miss you Miss the smile you kept on my face Miss the way you kissed me Miss your soft colored eyes Miss the way you loved me The way you made me feel I miss you so much So much more then you know The more I remember I wish I could forget Forget all these memories Memories that stay haunting me Through each sleepless night Each endless night Without you |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow.........shear wowness here. Wonderful job on it........FULL OF POWER. This really caused in impact on me when I finished it. I have been through this exact same situation. At least you got flowers at some point, I got yelled at......big diff. Nice one here, a very good poem! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I guess we all do keep stuff for memories whether it be good or bad. you have shown such longing for someone you have written such beautiful words to show that thanks for sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I really love the format of this poem... how you took one word, and basically spoke of its signifigance. Very skillfully done, and emotional to boot. And as DD said, powerful. -Allan Would you really want everything that you thrive for, if you could never appreciate it? |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This style really caught my attention. well, I mean the way it's written, I love it. Great job of writing all of this into this great poem, thanks for posting it! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
This one brought a tear to my eye...I could almost imagine what I'd do if Justin did this to me...Lord knows I've been here before...but (usually) each relationship is better than the one before Hope this thlps ya feel better www.angelfire.com/wv2/poetrycorner I'm just a girl looking at a guy asking him to love me |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
wow... this leaves me speechless. just remember to keep your head up high because you will always have the last laugh. i've been in your position before, it's hard but i'm surprised you were able to write about it so wonderfully as you did. i have not been able to accomplish that task yet. *L* good luck in the future. ~Valerie~ *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
this is turly awesome! it left me in tears! i love the style it adds to the power of this piece. hope everythings ok. ~kate~ |
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