Teen Poetry #4 |
The Birthday Senryu CHALLENGE!!!!!!! |
Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Great idea, Jeremy! Okay, let's give it a go! Everyone write a Senryu about the day of your birth! (for those who don't know, senryu format is as follows-- 5 syllables 7 syllables 5 syllables now get crackin'!) Here's mine-- "November 6, 1984" glamour glows with greed gremlinesque is this small child one more mouth to feed That's mine! Now all of you, a Senryu about the day of your birth! What you think occurred, what you KNOW occurred, anything special about this day. Floor's open. ~_^ [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 01-11-2001).] |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
hmm.....I'm thinking a Birthday? baby boy coming to mind for some reason, don't mind me just bored at the moment. anyways nice work as always.< !signature--> >¶Øʆ< [This message has been edited by Poet on Acid (edited 01-12-2001).] |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Allan, for some reason I get the picture this is the date of your birthday?...maybe well since i cant write haiku's i think this one is very good. keep it up... Regina |
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Bright_Eyes Junior Member
since 2000-12-22
Posts 29Plymouth, MN |
I really like this piece....It flows very nicely! I enjoyed it so much I had to read it over and over...what's with the birthday thing? Is it your birthday? Happy Birthday! Keep up the sensational senryu's! |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
hey, maybe start a challenge "Birthday Senryu's"... just an idea... great one allan, im glad your sharing these ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
*BUMP |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I promise I'll come back sometime today and type a better reply "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a wonderful challenge! You'll be seeing something from me soon! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful idea, and excellent entry to get everyone going Allan, great Senryu! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
My birthday sucks. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Yeah, I'm back. I don't have a better reply though. Nice job on the poem, maybe I'll take the challenge "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Wonderful idea Jeremy and Allen thanks for going through with jeremy's idea it was great fun and brought back many memories i otherwise would have forgotten. |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great work, I have attempted soemthing that vaugely resembles something relevant, I will post it soon!! Good Job guys MelZ!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
This is great. Nice challenge< !signature--> "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 01-12-2001).] |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
what an excellent idea...and from one budding haikuist to another, i thank you for the challenge |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Well done, Allan....but come on, all babies are beautiful! Maybe I'm sappy, but they are! |
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