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Me Or You |
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Tia Junior Member
since 2000-05-05
Posts 41massachusetts |
I stand so far away Wondering whether it's you that don't like me Or whether its me that don't like me I feel lost and confused I feel dead and alone like a lost little girl I sit by myself Thinking in my mind Could I ever be that happy? Could I ever smile like that? I feel sensitive and quiet A vulnerable little girl I am I lay in bed crying alone once again...wondering Are these the tears I've caused? Or are these the tears you've caused? I lay on the floor dying Wondering...was this my fault? Did I imagine I was nothing? Or did you imply it? It looks like you won once again... My theory is that I might die at any moment, the tragety is that I don't... |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
i cant stand when someone gets the best of you... gotta say the most powerful thing you said was: "Did I imagine I was nothing? Or did you imply it?" that leads me to think a lot.. thanks for the read ~JDR "I am two minded. I have two sides of thinking." |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
gotta agree with jeremy..that line really hit me..there is some great talent at work here...great job "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great one here, the last line really got to me. I liked this a lot.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Oh do I know this feeling too well!!! Nice job on this~ xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
It's not rare that one experiences this, but it is not easy, either. Was it me, or you, or perhaps some third party? It can get confusing trying to place these things. You captured this dillema beautifully. I look forward to reading more of your work. -Allan Would you really want everything that you thrive for, if you could never appreciate it? |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Never let anyone get the best of you Never let anyone think your less than who you really are Never let anyone make you blame yourself for something you haven't done I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
Good poem, keep writing. The thoughts were excellent.  ) |
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