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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... 
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Black Coffee drips Periodically As the silence screams to be heard Confusion Permeates Settles in And (inevitably ) Takes over The resonating drip drip drip -plink- Drip Pounds against the hard, scratched surface of the table Seeing the words Listening to their sordily rapid movements But not hearing -not feeling -not touching Frustrates the senses beyond ( basic ) Instinctual insanity Clawing and scortching the page with eyes ablaze The body Tightens Tenses and Clenches Futile tears of Frustration form as the muted ( raging ) Howl of a woman undone erupts from within The drip of black liquid divides The Voices - of - Silence; drip-slash Drip-slash.Drip-slash Drip ( slash ) Blood throbs between the temples were an ache Drip...slash Gathers like a posse of corroding famished scavengers Raking through the dregs of black on white Picking up pieces of ( loose ) leaf litter Pictures form BURN ( disintergrate ) Then return as the percolator ( finally ) snaps into place. ~Ripple~ ok so i hope that that peeved you off as much as studying did to me....  ...black black coffee...black black coffee....*floats away* |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was pretty dark poetry cherish. I liked it so much though. Simply amazing. I read it Natalia and she really liked it. Keep posting and i'll keep reading.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
 hiya Nat!!!....you should come online woman!!!dark?...who said anything about dark?..i guess in retrospect it would seem pretty dark...but all i could think of was how frustrating studying is sumtimes.... |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Cherish.. this is awesome. The style, the format... the way you used HTML. It was all excellent. VERY nice work! --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great work Cherish... I know i'm a little late reading this but it is truly excellent... I like your critque message as well...  rotflmao |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
thanks you guys... ...im glad you enjoyed it ..it makes me happy to know that liked it.. hahha...zu...im crazy you know that dont you?...  |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Ohhhhhhhhh my goodness cherish....This was just plain awesome....I felt some sort of connection with it, though I've never had coffe  Well anyways...keep writing stuff...heh...mmhmm I'm done now ~Carly "Go outside and use your own eyes. You'll be surprised to see things you've never been taught..." |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
nice format!.. ...but the poem on the serious side...was taht this...the my far best from you...very dark indeed...and how youw rote it...*gave me shivers*..OoOOOoooOO...hahahah...awesome poem ...keep it up ya Cherish!..  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Hey Cherish!  to you and a  too. hahahaI LOVED this format you used. The bolds and italics add so much to the whole effect. An absolute EXCELLENT write here. I loved it. [This message has been edited by Spice (edited 06-29-2001).] |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
all i can say is "dude-that was deep"(its a quote from the disney movie "brink") this was cool i really liked it "At nude weddings everybody can see the best man!" "I have a glass house with no windows" "save a horse, ride a cowboy!!!" |
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Postman Pat Junior Member
since 2001-08-05
Posts 23The Great Land DownUnder |
You already know how much I liked this poem. I really do hope that you win in that thing with this poem (I'm sorry I can't remember the name of the publication thing). You did really well with this one-LOL- it was the first time i thought you had "talent" of any sort LOL...I kid! Good job on this one-it kinda puts me in awe of you-yes Patrick admits to being in awe of you!...only in the slightest though-LOL! Bye Cherish bebe |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
This is such a wonderful poem, I'm glad that I revisted it as it such brilliant writing. Andrew |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
hey cher! I had to read through it twice to actually understand it, but it's been awhile since I've read anything of real meaning that didn't have to do with school or some other useless thing that has to do with work. Sad, sad little life I've started to lead, haha. Anyway, enjoyed the read twice. luv ya!! If you are feeling unsuccessful just think about this: eagles may soar, but weasels don't get sucked into jet engines. |
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