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Mykels_Angel Junior Member
since 2001-06-25
Posts 38australia |
hey guys.. its me again  heres another song we wrote that i'd just like to share with you guys i hope you like it In the far corner, close my the swings. Every morning, A black bird sings. His bill is so yellow, His coat is so black, That he makes a boy whistle back. Fly awai, over the sea, sun- loving swallow for summer is done. fly awai, over the sea, sun - love swallow for summer... is done. Come again come again back to me bringing the summer and bringing the sun come again come again back to me, bringing the summer and bringing... THE SUN! there hope u guys like it |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I didn't much like this one....But I hope to see more from you.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Not bad. I liked the others I've read from you more. But I look forward to reading more from you soon. Nice work.. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
good job!...i liked the concept of the blackbird part ...bye Sarah  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Love's Addiction Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 57all around you |
DOPEY!!! how couldnt u like this? well i liked it neways......nice job on it.  I can't hold on.....how do u think i've lost so much?....i'm so afraid....-Linkin Park |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
All your poems are great! Lauren |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Meh...Sarah, not the best one but it could be better with a bit of work. ~AF~ Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!! |
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