In memory of a guy i knew.

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Teen Poetry #4

In memory of a guy i knew.

princess^sarah
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since 2001-01-12

Posts 131
melbourne

0 posted 2001-06-24 11:14 PM

One day when I was walking,
I passed a boy near me,
He was all bruuised and beaten
From his head down to his knees.
His face showed no emotion,
The shirt he wore was torn.
He walked like he was nothing,
He wished he'd never been born.

But still I walked with steady strides,
Along my merry track.
If I had of known at that time,
I'd probably would of raced back.

Still, by the time I reached my home,
Turned around and closed the gate.
I watched the news and saw the boy,
No, it was too late.

The boy had held a gun up high,
A gun raised above his head.
The sweet boy is gone forever more,
Yes, the boy is dead.

This is such a sad one

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

1 posted 2001-06-25 12:05 PM

Oh wow, that ending is so not what I was expecting! That was brilliant (I think, anyway)!
Rhonda

"Amy, can you PLEASE come to Spain with us so that we have someone to keep Rhonda calm?" - Mr. Ardiel *insert hysterical laughter from me here*

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-06-26 12:57 PM

Sad poem yes......I didn't see this as glorification. I saw this as just a sad tale of a guy you thought you could have saved somehow. I liked it.

Mykels_Angel
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since 2001-06-25

Posts 38
australia

3 posted 2001-06-26 01:21 AM

oops i mean a

not a >

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

4 posted 2001-06-27 07:49 PM

^..uh..huh?..

...anyways...this is indeed a sad life you told...i really liked it...the ending was very powerful Sarah...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

TopGunLauren
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since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

5 posted 2001-06-27 08:15 PM

I just wrote a poem like this about my friend who killed himself a few days ago. But people actually read your poems so keep up the awsome work.Your poem was very well writen.
Lauren

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

6 posted 2001-09-07 03:07 PM

Yes it is a sad piece but unfortunately a reality. Things like this happen every day and if people have a course nothing will stop them from sailing it.

Nice piece Sarah.

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

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