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fozzyozzy
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since 2001-03-15
Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

0 posted 2001-06-23 11:13 PM


jIGsAw

Nothing seems to fitsome pieces
are BETTer that othERS
Watch me with your iis piece this together
Can you recognize this pictre of mumblingsoflove
                                       for
                                        u

Come   back   another hour maybe? i don't know
(this frame. where is it? does it end?)
I suppose I don't fit_____for you

Come   back   i connected these two  youare
help me find the last
it's only one more
can you spare
me time

                   (hours pass
                    sun kills moon
                      moon avenges
                    a cosmic timeframe
                    says it is complet  look)
    Youaremy
    f            o
    o           n   ...I guess we burn it now...
    r            l             its fine
    love  lady                   as it is.



"This is cactus land!!!"-T.S.Eliot

[This message has been edited by fozzyozzy (edited 06-23-2001).]

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Linc
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1 posted 2001-06-24 08:52 AM


Hey,

   Format was cool and I liked the poem! Until your next cool poem

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fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24
Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)
2 posted 2001-06-25 05:47 AM


hey, i really liked this one.  in some parts the format got a lil confusing (at least for me), but that adds to the poem.  my favorite part is
Can you recognize this pictre of mumblingsoflove
                                       for
                                        u

..eh i think it copied weird, but it's still kool. thanks for the interesting read.  keep postin.
-fear-


emotions are like evil serpents that coil around your mind---me "i cannot save you, i can't even save myself"--stabbing westward

cherish
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since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........
3 posted 2001-06-26 12:44 PM


oh wow.....i dont know what to say...i think that this is one very cool poem buddy!!....i didnt know what was written at te end....but everything else was awesome!!!!!..

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

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4 posted 2001-06-26 01:33 AM


I loved the format here.....very interesting.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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