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Ski*Chick
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since 2001-01-13
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0 posted 2001-06-22 04:49 PM


Missing you……..
You come into my dreams you don't remember me
I say I'm the one who loves chocolate
I want to cry because you're dying
I think oh my gosh is this real again
or just a dream?
I get so scared because you are dead
You scare me
your face looks so white as a ghost
your body is skinny and limp
But all it was a dream
~*~Minna~*~

Learning how to walk, Learning how to talk, are the hardest thing to do in a baby life. Learning how to walk for me is the hardest thing to do.

© Copyright 2001 Minna - All Rights Reserved
angel_2401
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since 2001-06-12
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Cincinnati, OH
1 posted 2001-06-22 04:53 PM


This is good, I like it.... Keep writing!

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

I'm a nobody, nobody is perfect, therefore I'm perfect.

obscurity of cloud
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2 posted 2001-06-22 05:19 PM


this is so so sad   i really liked all of it, especially your first line.  very nicely done.  

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

DarkAngelOfTheStars
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3 posted 2001-06-22 05:23 PM


this is the first one i have read of yours and it was good   i liked it a lot keep posting

one morning you wake up afraid you are going to live

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4 posted 2001-06-23 12:11 PM


very sad...and i also really liked the first line...great job overall ...bye

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5 posted 2001-06-23 01:12 PM


This is so sad.  Nice work.  Very powerful and emotional... I enjoyed this.

--Marie

"Well the sun is slowly sinking down, but the moon is slowly rising. So this old world must still be spinning ‘round, and I still love you."–James T.

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6 posted 2001-06-26 12:36 PM


So sad....*sigh*.....get better...


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