»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #4
»
how i lost myself
| Teen Poetry #4 |
|
how i lost myself |
|
|
DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
ok this isnt my best really im just venting.....so yeah i dont even know if it will make sense to any of you.....it still needs some work I invented this monster For fun? I’m not quite sure It seemed good at the time I could put on this mask each day And I was different And had such a mysterious way of living But the more I lived that way The more I lost myself I became more like the masked person each day The person that no one seemed to like But with everyday I was more and more like that person Until I lost myself completely I’m in the dark without a light And the monster that wasn’t So big Or so scary in the beginning Has become over towering And gruesome People don’t realize how little of me is left And I hate them for not knowing And not hearing my screams I hate them for saying It will be better in the morning Or I could be better if I wanted too Because it will never be better in the morning And I can’t be better Each time I try to be who I “should” have been I’m a stranger to myself I truly don’t remember how to be me I never thought this monster would overpower me I thought I was strong enough to stand against it But it has me pinned against the wall And I can’t fight it anymore one morning you wake up afraid you are going to live [This message has been edited by DarkAngelOfTheStars (edited 06-22-2001).] |
||
| © Copyright 2001 Kat - All Rights Reserved | |||
Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I loved this one. It kinda reminds me of something, but I am not sure if that is your situation or not, so nevermind. You did a good job venting!! *~*Amanda*~* |
||
|
Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Sorry, I forgot the button... |
||
|
anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
...i really liked this poem...and you expressed this very well...the ending was powerful and great job on venting  ..and i hope things are alright...bye Kat  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
||
|
Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought the ending was very powerful......well done on this one  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
||
|
Ski*Chick Member
since 2001-01-13
Posts 141Fitchburg, Mass, Usa |
 Hey I hope your days get brighter, try to be happy!! Min Learning how to walk, Learning how to talk, are the hardest thing to do in a baby life. Learning how to walk for me is the hardest thing to do. |
||
|
DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
see thats what im talking about i cant *just* be happy its not possible....but anyways thanks guys one morning you wake up afraid you are going to live |
||
|
obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
wow this has such a powerful message. I really see where you're coming from and i think you've written it very well. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
||
|
Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Whoa...MMmmhmmm been there. Made sense to me...perfect sense...Good luck in finding yourself... ~Carly "Go outside and use your own eyes. You'll be surprised to see things you've never been taught..." |
||
|
Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I know how you feel. You described the emotions very well. nice work. I enjoyed this. I hope you feel better. --Marie "Well the sun is slowly sinking down, but the moon is slowly rising. So this old world must still be spinning ‘round, and I still love you."–James T. |
||
|
Alysia182 Junior Member
since 2001-06-22
Posts 19CT |
Hey....good job! i know how you feel...everyone is always telling me that i'm just putting on a show, and that i could be happy if i really wanted to. but its not like that! its not there life that there talking about and they dont know how i feel . But oh well....let them think what they want. I loved your poem. Alysia **Somewhere over the rainbow, way up high.... |
||
|
cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
Until I lost myself completely I’m in the dark without a light wow.....this took my breath awaay daofs!!!!...i loved the way you expressed yourself throughout it all!!....its awesome!....venting or not venting excellent poetry dark!!!...more!! more says i!!! "Life is not long and boring, |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
