Teen Poetry #4 |
In the tides |
anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
i might leave this one as it is...or i might extend it to be longer..not sure won't you won't you won't you even try to speak even whisper in my ear when i am asleep? tell me what i've forgotten so that i remember you forever come with me for a ride in the tides in the tides won't you come and drown with me? in the evening... don't you know? don't you know what's underneath? "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" [This message has been edited by anomaly187 (edited 06-21-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
interesting...kinda confusing...but enjoyable meaning you were writing here...great job!...bye im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I liked this. It's different from what I've seen from you, but I liked it. Nice work. --Marie "Well the sun is slowly sinking down, but the moon is slowly rising... so this old world must still be spinning 'round. And I still love you." -James |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Bloody hell, I've seen the grace of Heaven! This was simply amazing. I really loved the deepness within this poe. Anomaly, it's always such a pleasure to read your work. I have been a fan since I first joined. You are a poet to admire. Such wonderful work, I loved it. Hit home right away I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I liked it. It is the first of yours that I have read, and I look forward to many more. *~*Amanda*~* |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
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I really liked the line "tell me what i've forgotten" ...very powerful. Excellent work! "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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