A girl I like (leave a comment if you like)

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Teen Poetry #4

A girl I like (leave a comment if you like)

Nicholas
Junior Member

since 2001-06-08

Posts 20
Washington , U.S

0 posted 2001-06-20 04:45 PM

This is to a girl I have liked for about a year and just told her today, hope you like the poem and you can leave a reply.

Brandi

Why are you so awesome
In every aspect you never stop to amaze
Your funny, bright, and fun to be with
I've liked you for all these days

If I asked you to be with me
Would you say yes and how long would it be
every night I long to see
Your beautiful face during period three

Please forgive me and just say yes
For someday I might request

-nicholas-

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

1 posted 2001-06-20 06:45 PM

I liked this poem. I liked the way you used the couplet at the very end, although I did think that rhyme was kind of choppy. I enjoyed the read. Good luck with this girl.
Nicely done.

--Marie

"Well the sun is slowly sinking down, but the moon is slowly rising... so this old world must still be spinning 'round. And I still love you." -James

Shygirl82
Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois