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Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

0 posted 2001-06-19 06:38 PM

Hey you guys! I'm having writers block. And this is going to be the longest and most boring summer ever. Well, I gotta bounce

, but I hope ya like this one.

You see a girl
Full of confidence
With her head held high
Surrounded by her friends
The girl who lives a happy life
And has an ever present smile plastered on her face

But your eyes are deceiving
They keep you believing
In what doesnt exist

For I do not see that girl
I see the one behind her
Chasing away the shadows
The one looking at the ground
And dragging her feet
Meeting no ones eyes
Just scanning the area
For an escape from the crowd

So you eyes are deceiving
They keep you believing
In what doesnt exist

*~*Amanda*~*

My tears roll right down my cheeks, but they all soak into my pillow. I feel kinda sorry for it...

Shygirl82
Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

1 posted 2001-06-19 06:46 PM

I really liked this one...what you said is so true...Excellent job

~Nikki~

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2001-06-19 07:16 PM

This was a very good poem, Amanda. It's impressive considering you said you have writer's block. I would never be able to come up with something like that with writer's block. The flow was pretty good, it broke in a few places, but overall it worked. The last stanza was my favorite.. very cool. I know what it's like to have deceiving eyes.

Nicely done. I enjoyed this.

--Marie

"Imagine a pageant...
In my head the flesh seems thicker,
Sandpaper tears corrode the filth,
And I need you now somehow." --Silverchair

stace_co2003
Member

since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

3 posted 2001-06-19 10:08 PM

I totally relate to this!! keep writing!!

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

4 posted 2001-06-20 12:34 PM

very true and real...hit close to home...i liked what you wrote here...so many go through this and as me i do relate...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

5 posted 2001-06-20 07:28 PM

good job. i liked this.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

6 posted 2001-06-20 09:04 PM

This one's good! I don't know what you're talking about when you say you've got writer's block! Isn't that the way of the world though? Everyone sees someone or something different. Good job!
Rhonda