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the_rescue
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since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

0 posted 2001-06-20 11:19 AM

wandering along the dessolate land for so long
the water ran dry and the manna grew stale
running in cirlces both day and night
never knowing what the next day would bring

in the wilderness i was trapped
in the wilderness i was birthed
in the wilderness I was saved

roamed around for 19 years not seeing the truth
the law was in front of my face yet
in my own rebellion I lost my place
then the voice called out from the mount of zion

in the wilderness I was trapped
in the wilderness i was birthed
in the wilderness i was saved

brought up promised milk and honey
but times came and trials ragged
while I forgot my duty and went my own way
i almost lost all that was promised

In the wilderness i was trapped
in the wilderness i was birthed
in the wilderness i was saved

turned around set my life straight
but my consequences still haunt me today
I allow He that is able to lead me
and bring me to the promised land

In the wilderness I was trapped
in the wilderness i was birthed
in the wilderness i Am Saved

I'm not asking U 2 luv me I'm just letting out the truth no hold barred about what I feel nothing wrong with what I say

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

1 posted 2001-06-20 12:21 PM

Awesome work, here. I enjoyed this poem a lot. The change in the last line is really touching. Is this a song? I think it would make a good song too. Just a thought... I enjoyed this. Very nice message.

--Marie

"Imagine a pageant...
In my head the flesh seems thicker,
Sandpaper tears corrode the filth,
And I need you now somehow." --Silverchair

ethel lahootie
Member

since 2001-03-06

Posts 143
SC, USA

2 posted 2001-06-20 12:22 PM

i liked this....especially the last line "...i AM saved" very good! -ethel-

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

3 posted 2001-06-21 10:05 PM

we all are save by the grace of GOD! HE LOVES YOU SO MUCH AND EVERYONE ELSE! i love ya bro!
robin

I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL!

AngelPoet87
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 280
Indy

4 posted 2001-06-21 10:14 PM

Yeah I agree with the others that this should be a song. Lovin the last line, and the rest of it too, for that matter. Great job, keep it up!

obscurity of cloud
Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 294
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5 posted 2001-06-21 10:27 PM

this has such a great sense of peace. I really love it! The spiritual forum is great if you post like this often...they have a really wonderful perspective to offer.

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

6 posted 2001-06-21 11:34 PM

this was a nice poem...and the twist at the end...told it more