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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
This is an attempt at my first song... i didn't think it'd be a song but i figured hey why not *LOL* well here goes... You look distant tonight, Is something wrong? Are you feeling like you don't fit in? Or that you just don't belong? Yeah I've been there too More time's then I'll admit, I don't know why though That's just something I don't get. Chorus: I know how you're feeling babe, Trying to break free Thinking that there's no way you'll make it out Because no one else can see Getting the impression that That no one understands your plea You don't exactly want to be here… And you are just trying to break free. Walking down that long and windy road You find yourself on the never-ending track, Nobody sees where you're coming from But you know there's no going back (Chorus) I know how you're feeling… Trying to break free Thinking that there's no way you'll make it out But trust me, I can see I'm getting the impression That no one understands your pleas You don't exactly want to be here But together we can help each other break free. Come on come on and tell me why you're staring come on come on it must be what I'm wearing…tell me why's it takin so long for u to recognize and stop [This message has been edited by ~sugarpie313~ (edited 06-19-2001).] |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
I personally really liked this one and honestly think that it would make a good song. I think a lot of people could relate to it. Good luck in future writings... Always, ~Nikki~ |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I really liked this song. Do you have a tune to it yet? I would love to hear a MIDI. Wowers.. I'm impressed. I really enjoyed the read. Nicely done. --Marie "Imagine a pageant... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
No MIDI for you marie!! Anyway, nicely done....you play an instrument to make the song a reality? I liked it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
very nicely expressed emotions...in this song...i liked it...hope you record it or something and share it through mp3 or yea...hehehe..bye Val  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
it was wonderful! robin I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL! |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
thanks everyone, i don't have any music to this yet... LOL but anyone out there who does play guitar or piano (i think it would sound alright to that don't you?) let me know and i'd be willing to work wit you on it. hahaha and i'll share SOME of the credit. Valerie Come on come on and tell me why you're staring come on come on it must be what I'm wearing…tell me why's it takin so long for u to recognize and stop |
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