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MoeRocko
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since 2001-04-25

Posts 166
West Virginia

0 posted 2001-06-18 06:19 PM

~My personal tribute to Old English Poetry. Took a while, but it makes no sense. I should be proud~

I sat belonely down a tree,
humbled fat and small.
A little lady sing to me
I couldn't see at all.

I'm looking up and at the sky,
to find such wondrous voice.
Puzzly puzzle, wonder why,
I hear but have no choice.

Speak up, come forth, you ravel me,
I potty menthol shout.
I know you hiddy by this tree.
But still she won't come out.

Such softly singing lulled me sleep,
an hour or two or so
I wakeny slow and took a peep
and still no lady show.

Then suddy on a little twig
I thought I see a sight,
A tiny little tiny pig,
that sing with all it's might.

I thought you were a lady.
I giggle well I may,
To my suprise the lady,
got up and flew away.

If there's a such thing as a Genius, then I'm one. If there's no such thing then I don't care... ~John Lennon

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-06-18 10:44 PM

you lost me completely.....LOL it sounded neat though

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-06-19 01:48 AM

I thought this completely rocked the house. I LOVED this poem. I thought the flow and scheme was perfect.....your last stanza doesn't quite fit in with the rest of the poem. It lost flow and scheme.....maybe you should touch that up.
Anyhow, this poem is my ultimate fav. by you.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

MoeRocko
Member

since 2001-04-25

Posts 166
West Virginia

3 posted 2001-06-19 01:52 PM

First positive comment by you thus far Dopey. Thanx!

If there's a such thing as a Genius, then I'm one. If there's no such thing then I don't care... ~John Lennon

Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

4 posted 2001-06-19 02:50 PM

lol And we have a winner. Let's not take ourselves too seriously now...where would be the fun in that?

"...if you want love you must be love.."
Billy Corgan, Smashing Pumpkins

Freedom comes when you learn to live unafraid.

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-06-19 05:19 PM

This was pretty cool, Moe. I loved the flow and rhyme scheme.. they were perfect. Nice work! I enjoyed this.

--Marie

"Imagine a pageant...
In my head the flesh seems thicker,
Sandpaper tears corrode the filth,
And I need you now somehow." --Silverchair

obscurity of cloud
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since 2001-05-11

Posts 294
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6 posted 2001-06-19 07:29 PM

this is incredible!!! i really love this work and all you've put into it. It's one of those poems that should be read only aloud because it SOUNDS so wonderful. Great work.

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

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