Teen Poetry #4 |
Nothing more than heartache |
the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
words could never express what my heart feels right now you allowed him to take your life and use it against us some how he came in and played you like a board game and when it's done we only curse your name you hurt her you took away what was pure you hurt her mother how to look at you she's unsure her father you crushed like a bug under your shoe and her brother you left wondering what to do A family who must choose between there daughter and son where and why in the world has this battle begun I see you cry the tears are so real but what exactly do you feel I don't blame you for it was the father of lies but I can't stand to hear your mothers cries your fathers pain is to much to bear but in the Midst I know HE is still there Pain confunsion anxiety and distress all caused by pleasure just look at this mess I feel the tears as they roll down your face do you think that you are the disgrace I see the pain in the deepest part of your eyes though you act strong i see throught he disguise I know her words hurt as she says them to you but you killed her insyde what do you expect her to do The little girl sits not knowing what's going on all she knows is that mommies happiness is gone Why, Why did you listen to the Father of lies Why, Why did you allow yourself to fall to compromise My heart breaks for the girls mom, as well as for you but remember the GOD of love will see you through Pain will continue and the words will fly I know at times you'll want to die don't fall, please don't turn away you God doesn't leave, he's here to stay. "lean no on your own understanding" and don't fall to what this world is demanding. Dude I love you all more than words do explain I know what you feel I know the pain to the girl she is left in the hands of the King for the mother look at the hope tomorrow can bring for the father be the Dad God wants you to be as for the brother I will be fine you'll see I had a really really rough weekend this basically explains what is raging through my mind right now you know what I mean, maybe not peace The Rescue I'm not asking you to love me I'm just letting out the truth no hold barred about what I feel nothing wrong with what I say I'm not asking you to hate me I just want you to relate [This message has been edited by the_rescue (edited 06-18-2001).] |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wow, there were a lot of good emotions displayed here and I really enjoyed the read. Zu |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
so much emotion...i enjoyed it a lot...and liked the way you told them...but hope things are alroght ...bye im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Dr. Jo-Bizz Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 97 |
wow... i liked this, i liked the degree of emotion and passion you put into it. I think some of the things were repeated maybe too often... i guess i could be a little more suscint (sp?)... but still good. dr. jo But His word was in my heart |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
hey i really liked this godd job and i hope everything is ok! *hugz* Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Yea a lot of heartache in this one. The title said it all. Very well done. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
hun i love you you're like a big brother to me i known for a while now and you know i'm, always here for you so if you need anything you get a hold of me and vent okie babe. *smooches jimmy* robin |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow... Full of power and emotion. This was a very good poem. I enjoyed it. Keep posting all your work. --Marie "Imagine a pageant... |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
this has so much emotion. the rhyme scheme changes a lot, but i like the poem overall. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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