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lying to the world |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hi hi...i wrote this one last night pretty late. be honest n tell me wut u think! thanks. -fear- i can see the evil lurking in your eyes i can feel the hatred that you try to hide well quit lying and start living there's no point in running anymore just give up caring about those who hold you back screw "living to please" just live life as you! quit being society's little puppet jerked around on golden strings your face as wooden as your heart learn to look yourself in the eye then you'll realize... that i am you -fear- |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I really liked this one. I thought the twist at the end was superb. I couldn't even imagine you were talkin about yerself here. Kind of like giving yerself advice, right? I do that sometimes when I have a problem. I write and I solve it for myself. Great job! I really liked this one a lot.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hey thanks dopey! what you think means a lot to me, and i'm glad that you like it. :-) thanks again. -fear- |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
enjoyed the read greatly...very nice ending to it...great job!...bye  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great Work fearing-laughter I really enjoyed the read. Zu |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
thanks guys =) -fear- |
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