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My own Prison
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My own Prison |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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Ok everyone another song insipred poem. This one is "My Own Prison", by Creed. Its from the first album, "My own Prison". Probaly their best by far. Enjoy. "MY OWN PRISON" "The walls are cold and pale the cage made of steel" holds me closed away My eyes dart back and forth scanning this wide cell "Screams fill the room alone I drop and kneel" I don't care for my dignity I scream, scream Howling in pain Throwing decorum out of my life "Silence now the sound my breath the only motion around" Do you wish me to cry in my pain will it help you understand? Will you let me go? I can hear only my shallow breath "Shackled by my sentence expecting no return" I'm sorry I do not want to understand I can feel the heat the fever against my skin Perhaps I will die before this pain turns me delirious "So I held my head up high hiding hate that burns inside" I do not care for this cage! You dirty animals! Leave me be! I cannot see through this thick darkness I cannot feel in this light "Should have been dead on a Sunday morning banging my head" but I'm not "I've created my own prison" Regina Its garbage i know. Didnt do jusitce to the song. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Very expressive Ina You've become one awesome writer I love your style too very different from the norm Keep it up Ina keep sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Very impressive! I really love how you pour your emotions into this one. Wonderful piece, thanks for sharing.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Yea like acire said....you've really been writing some awesome poetry lately Regi. Keep this up and you'll be....ummm...praised more! So yea, keep it up!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
dude, that kicks so much ass how you quoted parts of the song throughout the song! i loved this one! i'm not a big fan of creed, but this is actually pretty kool. thanks for the read. later -fear- |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
nice right ina I'm really growing fond of your style writting, it's cool thanx for the good read later. I'm not asking U 2 luv me I'm just letting out the truth no hold barred about what I feel nothing wrong with what I say |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great work Ina, I really enjoyed the read as usual well done  Zu |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
thanks a bunch everyone. lol.... If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
emotional piece...expressed very well...i like it ...bye Ina  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I think it's pretty cool that songs inspire you so much. I like the song "My Own Prison". Very good song... Anyway, I really liked this piece. Your portrayed your emotions very powerfully. Wonderful work. Your last pieces I've read have been very strong... You're a talented writer. Keep sharing your work with us. Well done. --Marie "Imagine a pageant... |
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