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quietlydying

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since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

0 posted 2001-06-17 01:42 AM

written in utter despair and desolation, not my best, i just needed to get something out on paper.

Crazed Infidelity

Robbing my soul
of this wasteful youth
and innocence.

Taking a w a y,
that satisfaction I held
in matters so few.
The empty feelings
have all but
abandoned me,
that vodka-soaked-passed-
out-on-the-bathroom-floor-Lust
for their return
has taken over me.

Fill me with my
sick and twisted
Pride
in things
you could only
dream about.

...or are they nightmares?

Live through my eyes,
walk a mile in my shoes,
then
tighten
the noose.

Are you happy yet?

- jen

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-06-17 02:04 AM

hmmm...your expressed pain ina different way...i hope everythings alright...i think you did well on writing this...but i REALLy hope everythings..ok?

...bye Jen.

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

2 posted 2001-06-17 02:18 AM

Wow Jen!

I absolutely loved this one! The pain and Sadness was expressed beautifully. Amazing work here. And if I kept a library- this would go right in it hahaha. Keep posting!

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-06-17 03:17 AM

Awesome job here. Simply amazing poem! I really really enjoyed this one!! wowish! So very well written. I am fully impressed.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

4 posted 2001-06-17 12:24 PM

This was good work Jenn. Very powerful emotions.

Regina

If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive.

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-06-18 12:11 PM

Marvelous job, Jen. This impresses me very much. I loved the style, and the ending was chilling. Wowers... very impressive indeed. This poem is awesome... I can't wait to read more, so keep posting all your work.
Well done.

--Marie

"Imagine a pageant...
In my head the flesh seems thicker,
Sandpaper tears corrode the filth,
And I need you now somehow." --Silverchair

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

6 posted 2001-06-18 12:13 PM

Okay... got to click the button...

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

7 posted 2001-06-23 02:23 PM

beautiful read. youve done good on this write. keep it up. thanks for sharing

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DarkAngelOfTheStars
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since 2001-04-21

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