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fractal007
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since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

0 posted 2001-06-22 03:24 AM

How like a submarine this life becomes
When I and you, mine enemy, engage
In war of wits and battle that benumbs
The sense of mind and reason of this age.
We think and ponder: What's he planning now?
Your face and count'nance strike, your words enrage
The fires of this mine anger and my fowl
Intent to kill, to mame, and then engage!
But in mine anger t'ord the enemy
I lose my sense of human friendship, love,
And care that make my soul and kill the sea
Of hate and jealousy that mame my love.
So in my next fierce war, my hate abounding,
I shall remember the fact: 'Tis male bonding!

This one is meant to poke fun at my tendancy to take things WAY too seriously instead of having fun with people.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-06-22 06:47 AM

i liked this poem...and it seems like you are writinga bout war once again

...hope tos ee more...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

stace_co2003
Member

since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

2 posted 2001-06-22 07:18 AM

awww, but even if you take things too seriously, you are still cool

when you want to be that is, lol, just kidding. anyway, this is a good poem, though I didn't understand it at first, I got it the second time around.

thanks for sharing!!!

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

obscurity of cloud
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since 2001-05-11

Posts 294
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3 posted 2001-06-22 02:07 PM

interesting style for your topic...intriguing. Nice work!

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-06-22 04:34 PM

I really loved the ending haha. The last line was classic. Awesome job.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-06-23 12:49 PM

The last line was awesome. Hehe.. nice work. I enjoyed this, as always.

--Marie

"Well the sun is slowly sinking down, but the moon is slowly rising. So this old world must still be spinning ‘round, and I still love you."–James T.

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