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Don't end up like me
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Don't end up like me |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
The sound of a gun going off is louder then being stabbed with a knife, When that gun went off it ended my life. Everyday I ask myself why I had to live my life the wrong way, Now my only wish is that I could live just one more day. Just so I can say goodbye to my family and friends, But how was I supposed to know my life would just sudenly end. If I could have said one last thing it would have to be, Everyone out there turn your life around now before you end up like me! By, Lauren |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
very interetsing...writing aftermath of death...that you did...i written some like this but not like this...i really liked thsi poem  ...hope to see more...bye Lauren  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Neat perspective, Lauren. Very interesting. I enjoyed this poem. It's very surreal, but very well written. nice work. --Marie "You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done here......a good message. Kind of like those "this is your brain...*egg drops in frying pan*...this is your brain on drugs" commercials. I enjoyed this one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I like this one. I really like the perspective! Good job! Rhonda  "Who did that?" "Charlie and Blake." "Who's Charlie and Blake?" "Rhonda and Amy.""Great. There goes the school." |
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