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chasing rain
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since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

0 posted 2001-06-13 09:54 PM

Trapped within my world
High above the blue, clear dome
Of heaven am I.

From below my thoughts
Reach to the realm of heaven
Arms and hands outstretched.

Nothing but the wings
Of pure and holy angels
Can carry me there.

To the golden gates
And back again to my world
Is the ultimate
Sacrifice from Him
As a gift of freedom's dreams
To us He does send.

Accept and forgive
For this is how we must live
And how we must love.

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Another experiment...

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-06-13 11:15 PM

beautiful...the way you discribed such things was awesome...i really liked the poem...very interesting haiku style...i think this was great!...hope to see more of your experiments

...bye Leah

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-13-2001).]

LoveBug

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since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

2 posted 2001-06-14 12:28 PM

I really like this piece. Great religious descriptions, and very interesting style. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2001-06-14 01:42 AM

this is very beautiful....I like this very much!

~SEA

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

4 posted 2001-06-14 07:45 AM

I really liked this piece, well done and thanks for the great read.

Zu

the_rescue
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since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

5 posted 2001-06-14 08:59 AM

well done I really like the poem your description was good thanx

in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over. (SPOKEN)

keoni
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since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

6 posted 2001-06-14 11:05 AM

I love haiku. These were all extremely good. But the last one was freaking awesome!
"Accept and forgive
For this is how we must live
And how we must love."

That is so dope!I love it. Great job
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

7 posted 2001-06-14 11:09 AM

Beautifully done Leah
keep it up

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic

stace_co2003
Member

since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

8 posted 2001-06-15 07:35 PM

wow Leah! this was excellent!! I hope to read more from you soon!

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

9 posted 2001-06-16 02:50 PM

It's always good to test your skills in other forms of poetry. I liked this one Leah. Well done here!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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