Teen Poetry #4 |
Are we still friends |
Nicholas Junior Member
since 2001-06-08
Posts 20Washington , U.S |
I wrote this today right after I got home from school after being shut out by two of my best friends. Are We Still Friends I thought we were friends And I hope this never ends But why did you leave me behind You probably thought I would not mind To tell you the truth it hurt me Are We Still Friends Do I have to beg you to go Because when I ask you nicely you just say no I don't know what I did wrong I know I have my faults and I know I can be mean But I have feelings like a normal human being And I think if we work together We can still be friends -nicholas- Hi everybody this is really to my friends I just wanted them to know how I felt. |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Aw, I'm sorry, Nick. Me and Mike just had this planned for a while, to get together at the end of the year... I'm sorry. Course we're still friends - Cody - |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Good job here. I think that you might like to work a little more on your rhyming. You do a good job conveying the situation, though. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
graet job on the poem...i think you did well on telling this...and its hard soemtimes friends do that...dont worry it'll get better if you guys are really freinds ...bye Nicholas im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great job here.....you really showed how you feel greatly. I'm sure your friends would have gotten the picture if you showed this to them. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Ewww this was planned??? Thats not nice of your friends Mean mean people... |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
this is so sad!! But yeah, maybe you should show this to them...if they can't appreciate your masterful poetry, well...good luck. I hope it turns out ok. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Aww well if they planned something without you then you just plan something without THEM okay so maybe not but the poem was okay , until you next poem -- Linc "Blood Moon" |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
awwwwwwwww *hugz* i be your friend! robin I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
very heartfelt good writing |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
I can be your friend la la la oopss sorry the poem was good situation stinks but it will get better I'm not asking U 2 luv me I'm just letting out the truth no hold barred about what I feel nothing wrong with what I say |
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Nicholas Junior Member
since 2001-06-08
Posts 20Washington , U.S |
Hey thanks guys and girls for the replys everything worked out o.k and were still friends until later bye |
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