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Crash&Burn
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0 posted 2001-06-11 12:39 PM


I live on an Island and long before I was born my island Puerto Rico was a colony of Spain and during this time they built a casttle called "El Morro." Well the point of this history lesson is that I went to the castle a couple of days ago and I thought this poem up, enjoy.

Pausing Time

I sit here just to stare
A moment's moment facing the glare
Sitting on an aged wall
How many suns has it seen?
In them the truth hides
Yet this truth is of no care
For the past is now gone
And in this moment's moment
On this old castle wall
Facing the beach and the sun
With the wind making it even better
And there just staring
For a moment life stops.
I love you Puerto Rico
My home...my land.


I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

© Copyright 2001 Crash&Burn - All Rights Reserved
anonymous albert ?
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1 posted 2001-06-11 01:07 AM


a great tribute to your island!...i bet dopey will like this...intertesing poem...i enjoyed...bye and come by teen4


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stace_co2003
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2 posted 2001-06-11 01:25 AM


Dopey's gonna love this. heh heh heh. I like it too though!! I hope some day to visit there......I also hope to get out of the U.S. for an EXTENDED period of time.

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Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.
Don't kick a man when he's do

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3 posted 2001-06-11 01:57 AM


Jorge, I loved this poem. I love Puerto Rico with all of my soul. I remember a few blissful moments in El Morror sitting on those walls. One, a field trip with Miguel. Two, with sascha and felipe during La noche de San Sebastian while it was pouring rain. Man those were memories I'll never forget!
I felt this poem in my soul, but most likely it's because I can relate to it completely. VERY well written Jorge, such a nice poem.

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I admire it daily

Ina
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4 posted 2001-06-11 10:41 AM


This was vey beautiful. full of amazing imagery"
"Sitting on an aged wall
How many suns has it seen?
In them the truth hides
Yet this truth is of no care
For the past is now gone"

that was my favorite part of  the poem.


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5 posted 2001-06-11 04:17 PM


I'd love to see it for myself...must be magical there  
Crash&Burn
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6 posted 2001-06-14 08:31 PM


well I'm glad you guys enjoyed it and I hope to see you all here some day ;-)

I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

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7 posted 2001-06-19 06:58 PM


great tribute to you home country
very nationalistic
that is really good
unfortunately, Puerto Rico has Dopey  
that's the only bad thing lol j/k
great job Crash&Burn

hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

Crash&Burn
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8 posted 2001-06-19 11:47 PM


heyheyhey you ppl have something with Dopey you know lol. Puerto Rico has me too and I know most of you don't care but I care!! So woohoo for me lol. Oh well if seeing Dopey and having him so near, is such an honor I have not discovered, then envy me because he lives near, Cheers to all.


I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

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9 posted 2001-06-21 03:34 AM


Jorge, you know you love knowing me personally. C'mon, admit it....I add meaning to your life.
Crash&Burn
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10 posted 2001-06-21 03:25 PM


Maybe not meaning but you definitely add something lol



I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

[This message has been edited by Crash&Burn (edited 06-22-2001).]

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