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angel_2401
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since 2001-06-12

Posts 131
Cincinnati, OH

0 posted 2001-06-13 05:26 PM

Thinking of all the times I hurt you
Thinking of all the times I was there for you
Thinking of all the times we've been through
Thinking of how I love you
Thinking of things that will never be
Thinking of dreams only I see
Thinking of times you hurt me
Thinking of things that will never be
Thinking of you only makes me cry
Thinking of you, I sigh
Thinking of how you wanted to fly
Thinking of how you said good-bye

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

fractal007
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since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

1 posted 2001-06-13 05:35 PM

Impressive poem. I like the ending. I always gotta love those times when u can't stop thinking about one thing or another. U might like to try a structured rhyme scheme of some sort.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-06-13 11:42 PM

you written this one nicely...as the poem throughout told your sitaution of thinking well...i enjoyed the read...bye Kristen

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2001-06-14 01:49 AM

this is so sad....but I like the way you wrote it

stace_co2003
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since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

4 posted 2001-06-14 12:55 PM

Albie hunny, it's Kristin.

but Kris, I like this poem...it's an interesting format, one I don't see too often. and you convey your feelings really well. keep it up sis.

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

5 posted 2001-06-14 06:07 PM

oops!...

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Ina
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

6 posted 2001-06-14 09:20 PM

This was very intersting. Good work on it.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

7 posted 2001-06-16 03:31 AM

I thought you wrote a nice poem, but whenever I read poems like this....the kind that the first word repeats on a constant basis throughout the WHOLE ENTIRE POEM...it's annoying. That's my own personal opinion. As for the general poem, the poem itself was nicely done. Nothing wrong with it.
Great job.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

8 posted 2001-06-19 07:46 PM

beautifully done angel_2401
i liked the repetitions, it was done well
thanks for the beautiful read
keep sharing

hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

Shygirl82
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since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

9 posted 2001-06-19 07:57 PM

I really loved this one. I can really relate to it. Take it one day at a time....
Always
nikki

Cinch01
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since 2001-06-19

Posts 14
RS, BR

10 posted 2001-06-19 09:29 PM

Hey girl. I like your poem, I can relate to it. It has feeling. I love it.

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