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MoeRocko Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 166West Virginia |
-Often my poems seem to lead to a point but rarley do, here's another.- So long ago, it felt it wasn't a dream I know, yes I know It seemed so very real So real to me Took a walk down the street I thought I could hear Somebody called out my name As it began to rain Two spirits dancing so strange Dream away, magic in the air I believe, what more can I say On the river of sound to the distant merry-go-round I thought I could feel You touching my soul Sudden warm, sudden cold Then I awoke and saw you there It was you It is you You are a dream. It seems so real I believe. This Is Not Here |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I like, I like! It took a few times for me to get it, but I'm sick, so that's probably why. That was so cool! Keep it up, and don't worry if your poems seem to lead to a point and don't have one. Poetry doesn't have to have a point. You should see some of the ones I've written! Rhonda  "Who did that?" "Charlie and Blake." "Who's Charlie and Blake?" "Rhonda and Amy.""Great. There goes the school." |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
OK, I'm still trying to get the point of this one. It doesn't deserve to be on page 3 without at least 2 replies. Well done.  ~AF~ Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!! |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
that was really good I liked it lots peace in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over. (SPOKEN) |
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angel_2401 Member
since 2001-06-12
Posts 131Cincinnati, OH |
I like this one... it's really cute and imaginative. Keep writing!  I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
wow, that's really great!! I love it!! good job! I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I like the feel of this |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one a lot. You did very well on this one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i REALLY liked this one...it came very beautiful to me...written nicely...great job!...bye Ewok  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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