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MoeRocko
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0 posted 2001-06-13 12:23 PM


-Often my poems seem to lead to a point but rarley do, here's another.-


So long ago, it felt
it wasn't a dream
I know, yes I know
It seemed so very real
So real to me

Took a walk down the street
I thought I could hear
Somebody called out my name
As it began to rain
Two spirits dancing so strange

Dream away, magic in the air
I believe, what more can I say
On the river of sound
to the distant merry-go-round
I thought I could feel
You touching my soul
Sudden warm, sudden cold

Then I awoke and saw you there
It was you
It is you
You are a dream.
It seems so real
I believe.

This Is Not Here

How do I know where to go when I don't know which way I'm facing

© Copyright 2001 Ewok Enterprise - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-06-13 12:32 PM


I like, I like! It took a few times for me to get it, but I'm sick, so that's probably why. That was so cool! Keep it up, and don't worry if your poems seem to lead to a point and don't have one. Poetry doesn't have to have a point. You should see some of the ones I've written!

Rhonda  

"Who did that?" "Charlie and Blake." "Who's Charlie and Blake?" "Rhonda and Amy.""Great. There goes the school."

anonymousfemale
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2 posted 2001-06-14 12:08 PM


OK, I'm still trying to get the point of this one. It doesn't deserve to be on page 3 without at least 2 replies.

Well done.  

~AF~

Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!!

the_rescue
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3 posted 2001-06-14 12:16 PM


that was really good I liked it lots peace

in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over.  (SPOKEN)

angel_2401
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4 posted 2001-06-14 02:02 PM


I like this one... it's really cute and imaginative. Keep writing!  

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

stace_co2003
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5 posted 2001-06-14 02:12 PM


wow, that's really great!! I love it!! good job!

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

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6 posted 2001-06-14 05:00 PM


I like the feel of this  
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7 posted 2001-06-16 03:12 PM


I liked this one a lot. You did very well on this one.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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8 posted 2001-06-16 03:20 PM


i REALLY liked this one...it came very beautiful to me...written nicely...great job!...bye Ewok

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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