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anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

0 posted 2001-01-28 09:57 AM

This is yet another quick one. There is a special meaning behind it though. Once again, no title. I've gone blank for them now.

Speaking in whispers,
She reveals her plan to someone.
The reaction did not matter,
The deadline had already been set.

Completion upon her lips,
The actions embrace her hands.
They are so warm, so full of life,
But hold so little.

The luxurious finish,
Memorable for years to come.
The opening begging her to leave,
The end dragging her in.

She accepts what has to come,
She knows what will become of it.
But how did she compete for strength,
When life had betrayed her?

Bickering with herself,
Awakening demons that were so well kept.
Slowly they over run her mind,
And keep her locked down tight.

~AF~

"Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment."
Buddha

Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

1 posted 2001-01-28 12:45 PM

Wow..I just love this one...it hit me in a certain way that I can't quite put my finger on. I'd give you ideas for a title but I'm not very good with titles. Sorry.

I am no one if not myself.

Angel of Darkness

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

2 posted 2001-01-28 03:05 PM

hmm, as for a title im too lazy to think
gotta say this is awesome for a quick one...
maybe try and really capture what your feeling in a long thought out poem just to see what happen, i bet you could surprise yourself
but these quick ones make me tingle

~JDR

"Is it love in my gut, or piss in my bladder?" -Allan Riverwood

anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15

Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US

3 posted 2001-01-28 05:57 PM

these quick writes always have a lot of emotion piled into them because they are so on the spot and right from inside..this is a great post for such a poem written quickly..keep it up

"When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro"

Poet on Acid
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since 2001-01-07

Posts 325
Florida, USA

4 posted 2001-01-28 07:40 PM

whoa, I know you've probably heard this before, but you have some serious talent. I always look forward to reading your next poem. Keep it up.

>¶ØÊ†<

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-01-28 11:15 PM

This was good. I liked it and don't worry about the titles..........just name them after bob.....nobody knows him but it's ok

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-01-29 02:08 PM

I don't know how you guys could do it. Just sit down and write such magnificent poems. I envy your talent.

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

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