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the_rescue
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0 posted 2001-06-12 09:10 AM


Time is my enemy
it takes charge and gets the best of me
it locks me in it's jail cells
with alarms and 12 o'clock bells

Time is my enemy
it has me trapped in it's conspiricy
the one which states theres not enough time
so just shut your mouth and act like a mime

Time is my enemy
but never will it get the best of me
although it tries it won't hold me down
I'm in search of an eternal crown

Time is my enemy
but time to me is infinity
no boundries because forever I will live
because God chose this sinner to forgive

in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over.  (SPOKEN)

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1 posted 2001-06-12 11:13 AM


Well done, I really enjoyed the read  
Zu

"Death solves all problems, no man, no problem" J.V.Stalin 1918.


Dr. Jo-Bizz
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since 2001-06-06
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2 posted 2001-06-12 12:29 PM


hey,i really like it jimmy.  good job.  I feel that way sometimes about time, or the lack thereof.  

dr jo

But His word was in my heart
like a burning fire
Shut up in my bones;
I was weary of holding back,
And I could not.

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3 posted 2001-06-12 05:25 PM


I liked this one! Well done here!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

fractal007
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4 posted 2001-06-12 05:50 PM


Nice poem.  I am really growing fond of your work.  You do a rather good job with freeverse.  Have you ever tried anything with a little more structure, like something with syllable count?  I think you might like to try it.  

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

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