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stace_co2003
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since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

0 posted 2001-06-08 11:35 PM

SLEEPLESS NIGHT

I lay in my bed, deep in thought.
How do I feel? I’m so distraught.

I turn on my side and stare at the wall,
I just don’t know what to do about it at all.

I turn on my back and stare at the ceiling.
What is this new sensation that I’m feeling?

I lay on my stomach, my face in my hand.
What do I do? I just don’t understand.

I sit up in bed - I just can’t sleep tonight.
There’s something about me that’s not right.

I lay back down and close my eyes.
For right now - sleep seems wise.

Before I know it, I’m back on my side.
Wondering again in whom I can confide.

I touch the wall, then look up at the ceiling.
Maybe all I need is some time to start healing.

I smile slowly as I close my eyes,
And the tear on my cheek slowly dries.

For now I know I must not weep
As I slowly drift off to sleep.

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

1 posted 2001-06-09 12:19 PM

Aww Stace- I liked this one alot. Great Read!

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

2 posted 2001-06-09 02:51 AM

You got your pic up!!! *dances around* yeah! *dances around some more*

This piece is so sad. Keep your head up though. You know where to find me if you need to talk.

~AF~

Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!!

MindlessPoet
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since 2001-04-20

Posts 106
Texas

3 posted 2001-06-09 03:06 AM

many nights laying awake in bed... but you fell asleep

hehe. I liked this piece!

*TiMMYBoY*
Yeah, that's me. The Weird One.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

4 posted 2001-06-09 03:22 AM

so thats our stace!!...great to see you

...ok?...on the poem i do this everynight and sometimes i just write some poems like i did right now but tears to sleep is a very hard as i to be honest have been there...hope things get better

...but...you wrote this so well...i liked it even though its sad...and right now i just tried to sleep with no tears this time i guess...but i just couldnt..so i just wrote a poem then im here replying to some more and im about to go to sleep now

...bye Stace

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-09-2001).]

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

5 posted 2001-06-09 05:42 AM

Great work Stace,I really loved this and I thourghily enjoyed the read keep up the good work and keep sharing * hugs* Nice pic as well

Andrew

[This message has been edited by Marshalzu (edited 06-09-2001).]

fractal007
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since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

6 posted 2001-06-09 06:37 AM

Impressive. I think you just described a rather large portion of what goes on when I am faced with those annoying philosophical dillemas. Your poem is quite good. I like the cycle of "turns," lol. Oh yeah, remember that discussion about how you think your poetry ain't that great?

There's one point I forgot to make:

At least you've started out rhyming. LOL, I didn't because I thought I would never be able to rhyme. So, my advice to you is to start out with styles you are comfortable with, and then read other people's poetry and try to make steps to try and adopt their styles. For example, in my road to writing iambic[well, at least hopefully it's iambic now, lol] I started out writing poems with lines that were each 8 syllables, so that I could get a good feel for syllable count.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

HeAvEnS AnGeL
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since 2001-05-17

Posts 168
The Hot Girl From Canada

7 posted 2001-06-09 01:37 PM

Wow stace, this was beautiful! I hate those nites whn you have sooo much on your mind you just can't seem to go to sleep thn you stare around your bedroom then fianlly get so bored of that you finaly fall asleep.

Whatever tomorrow brings I'll be there, with open arms, and open eyes ~Incubus~

zarina
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since 2001-05-19

Posts 180

8 posted 2001-06-09 01:38 PM

Very nice! I know how that is...

Ina
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

9 posted 2001-06-09 02:52 PM

THis is really good work. Not sleeping sucks....i know that for a fact. good job

Regina

lonely*soul
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since 2001-04-05

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east haddam (moodus) ct :)

10 posted 2001-06-09 03:00 PM

awsome my fav. by ya i think

i wanted to kill the sexiest person alive, but then i realized suicide is a crime!! :)

Dopey Dope

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since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

11 posted 2001-06-10 01:38 AM

Wow, well done! Definately your best that I have seen! Yes, time will heal you and you just gotta ride the wave...
I enjoyed this poem stace and looking forward to more.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

LoneWolf
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

12 posted 2001-06-10 02:54 AM

wow this was awesome. i loved it. wonderful job here. it's going to my library.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

angel_2401
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since 2001-06-12

Posts 131
Cincinnati, OH

13 posted 2001-06-12 06:06 PM

Stace, you are a great writer, I wish I could write as good as you do.

You're heart will heal, so will everyone else's who hurts.

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

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