Teen Poetry #4 |
Overlooked.. |
Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Trapped in my mind With nothing to drown out the sound But harsh angry music, So loud I can't hear Hear myself think. Stuck, torn between fantasy Fantasy and reality Lies and truth And I'm screaming But I won't call for help. Screaming in my mind Where no one can hear me. Quietly hurting So know one knows. Clenching my teeth I won't say a word Listening with my door cracked open Hoping to decipher the conversation. Is it my fault? Whatever it was, whatever it is this time, What did I do? All the while trapped, torn, screaming In my mind. Crying, shaking, sobbing Quiet, calm face, Trustworthy plaster facade. Screaming so loud But music drowns it out Harsh angry lyrics So you can't hear, So you can't know, So you can't care. And no one has taken the hint Overlooked, trapped, torn Inside my mind. I didn't intend to post twice in two days, but things are (adjective) up, as you can tell. Sorry for bothering you guys, and sorry for it being so long. Thanks for putting up with me Bel Btw- Inspired by Papa Roach and Ina. [This message has been edited by Isabel Galaxia (edited 06-11-2001).] |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
aww hun i loved it! i know how you feel! i just wanna say if you ever need to talk or someone to listen im here! good job on the poem and i hope everything is ok. Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that [This message has been edited by DarkAngelOfTheStars (edited 06-11-2001).] |
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ethel lahootie Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 143SC, USA |
this is really good bel...hope everythings ok...? should i b worried? no more talks in cpII. wel once again good job keep ur head high!!!--joey-- |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
You can't hide from angry lyrics these days. Where are the Beach Boys and Van Halen when you need them?(i'm an old metalhead ) This poem is great. thx for the post, and love the freestyle. "This is cactus land!!!"-T.S.Eliot |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done here. I'm glad i didn't OVERLOOK this....HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA I'M SO FUNNY!!!!!! HAHAHA... ok no...but good job here. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
I loved this one. Although it did not have much in the way of technicals and form, it carried a feeling I know all too well. It reminded me of divorce. Is this what you were attempting to discuss in this poem? "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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