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Raven Skye
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since 2001-03-03

Posts 112
.In a House.

0 posted 2001-06-11 12:58 PM

Your eyes filled with tears,
Your heart ull of fears;
You think what will happen tomorrow,
But try to hide all the sorrow;
So wipe the tears away,
Although wishing he could stay;
Goodbyes aren't forever,
And make the hellos even better.

You pull away in your car,
Looking back from afar;
As he stands there waving his hand,
You remember him as best as you can;
The smell of his cologne brings a smile full of bliss,
As you taste his lips from you last goodbye kiss;
You picture him wearing your favorite red shirt,
And think God - why must this hurt?
But remember goodbyes aren't forever,
And always make the hellos even better.

*×´¨`·.×*Raven Skye*×´¨`·.×*
"Can't explain the way that I feel. You are the love I never found." -Cold

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-06-11 02:24 PM

"And think God - why must this hurt?
But remember goodbyes aren't forever,
And always make the hellos even better."

I think this is great! You said it very well

~SEA

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

2 posted 2001-06-11 03:13 PM

I really,really liked this. This is extremely sweet. I wish it were all that easy though! I truly enjoyed this poem and can't wait to see more.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-06-11 05:39 PM

i liekd the feeling this poem gave me...very nice...and the repitition worked well...i really liked the meaning behind...hope to see more

...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-11-2001).]

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-06-12 12:32 PM

Awwww I really liked this one. The ending was so true and quite positive.....a nice to way to look at things.
Well done!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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