Teen Poetry #4 |
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Raven Skye Member
since 2001-03-03
Posts 112.In a House. ![]() |
![]() Your eyes filled with tears, Your heart ull of fears; You think what will happen tomorrow, But try to hide all the sorrow; So wipe the tears away, Although wishing he could stay; Goodbyes aren't forever, And make the hellos even better. You pull away in your car, Looking back from afar; As he stands there waving his hand, You remember him as best as you can; The smell of his cologne brings a smile full of bliss, As you taste his lips from you last goodbye kiss; You picture him wearing your favorite red shirt, And think God - why must this hurt? But remember goodbyes aren't forever, And always make the hellos even better. *×´¨`·.×*Raven Skye*×´¨`·.×* |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"And think God - why must this hurt? But remember goodbyes aren't forever, And always make the hellos even better." I think this is great! You said it very well ![]() |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I really,really liked this. This is extremely sweet. I wish it were all that easy though! I truly enjoyed this poem and can't wait to see more. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liekd the feeling this poem gave me...very nice...and the repitition worked well...i really liked the meaning behind...hope to see more ![]() ![]() im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-11-2001).] |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Awwww I really liked this one. The ending was so true and quite positive.....a nice to way to look at things. Well done! ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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