Teen Poetry #4 |
cant help but think |
DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
I know its not that good i just like the message..here it is Now I can’t help but think About the life that could have been Or the future that should have been The lives he would have touched If only, I had made another choice I think about his first day of school Who would be his best friend? Does the friend now feel something missing? Does he know That someone, That I Stole his friend away? Or what about his prom date Is she now dateless? The day of prom Will she cry in her bed? Wishing her soul mate was there Does she know, that her soul mate will never be And never was All because of me? I think that maybe, This choice wasn’t rightfully mine to make That this life I shouldn’t have a choice to take This baby, This baby that I killed Was innocent It was put here By my doings Why should another life suffer But mine? This future that could have been Is now forever changed Now I know, Its not just about “my body” Because this life that I took I didn’t just take from me I took it from this world This choice, It shouldn’t have been mine Because it wasn’t my body at all It was a life, A soul Of another human being In need of love and a place to grow And the day he died Apart of me died too This future that could have been Has now ended Before it started *i dont mean to offend anyone. This was kinda inspired by a talk with Albert so thanks * Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This was good. the ifs......hmmmm....if im right this is about abortion...i know that decision. Its hard to make. but the decision u make is the best one. being confident and secure. anyways enhough about me. this was an awesome message and poem |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Ok... never start with " this is rubbish" or people might just agree... and that would be a shame as I quite enjoyed reading this and I liked the message...great work and Keep on sharing. Zu |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow...touchy subject.....I personally think that a woman sould have the right to choose, keeping abortion safe and legal is important....missusing it as a form of birth control makes me sick. I see stories on tv about girls who put their babies in dumpsters and I cry and ache....why didn't they get an abortion if they weren't able to care for this baby? Why didn't they give it up for adoption???? My mind reels....I don't personally think I could ever get an abortion...but ohh never say never....sometimes it gets tested....I've learned that the hard way....mainly, if it is a choice that you don't want to make....then keep your legs closed. Harsh??? No, not at all....it's reality. SO as you can see...this stirred up some emotions in me.....LOL sorry to rant..... I thought it was a great poem.... |
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ethel lahootie Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 143SC, USA |
i agree w/sea. this was a very good poem...it brought up many views and opinions. i dont agree w/abortion but i guess ppl see it necessary. this is a very thought provoking poem...i like it. good job -eTheL- |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
OH man.....this was so sad.....*hugs* Well all I can say is that it was written nicely. This topic seems too fragile to comment about...I never do anyway. Well done on the poem. Hope to see more. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
wow I loved it right on, the way it was written rocke and then taking on such a hard topic good job....I liked the whole Idea of the people who will miss him it rocked, anyways putting it in my library, I wrote something like this a while back but lost it in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over. (SPOKEN) |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
really?...wow...im touched ...i was reading it...and it did sound similar...hehehe...and youw rote this very well...i really liekd the poem and the message was...of course...perfect!...hehehe...hope to see more...bye Kat im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-14-2001).] |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
At first i was like ..."what happened?!?!?!" then i realized it was about abortion when i read further on. I thought this was an amazing piece and a wonderful topic to write about although it can be a sensative spot to some. Something like this is kinda going on in my life but not to me..i completely agree with your message and i do think abortion is wrong but never say never cuz if i get in that situation i dont know what i would do. Great job |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
this was amazing. i really liked it. great job It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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