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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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"crawling in my skin. these wounds will not heal. fear is how i fall. confusing what is real." Another poem inspired by music. "crawling" by linkin park. CRAWLING The impending peril that is my life there is something slithering through out my mind where does my reality begin where does my fantasy end? prognosticating my futur "these wounds not heal" can you help me through this fear predestined to a tragic end everything is closing in my world is falling to pieces my body wrapped in a potato sack to ashamed of what I look like ashamed of who I am "crawling in my skin" theres a pain taking over my mind frenzied thoughts take over I can feel the adrenaline pumping through my viens where is my confidence? It was stripped away by an uncaring human "fear is how I fall." This phobia become real falling away from reality slipping away into darkness. The innocence is gone "confusing what is real." The pain is gone the light is gone the insecurity is back paralyzing my body Regina |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Ina --- I see a lot of pain in all your poems. But I do disagree with some of your thoughts. People do care and you should realize that. All you need to do is open up to them and show them that you are willing for them to care for you. At least you need to help yourself first before others can. Hope things get better for you. ~*hugs*~ hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wow I really enjoyed reading your work well done and thanks for the great read Zu |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
I really like the poem it was good and I agree with aquire with what said, people care about you. you just don't see it in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over. (SPOKEN) |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Regina, very good. I have read better ones, but this is still excellent. I have a different take on things so I am going to try and stand up for you Ina. I think that you know that people care, that's not what your talking about, it's the people in your life that matter most not seeming to care. That's my take, or maybe that's just my life. In my opinion, A million people could care about you but if the one person who you want to care about you doesn't, then nothing else seems to matter.Maybe I'm dead wrong or just smoking something but that is my take. Sorry for rambling. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
very thought provoking for me....good write  |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
so much pain i see in your poems lately...i really hope things are ok ...emotional poem...you expressed it well...bye Ina...im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
JOn your dead right.....not smoking up anything whack....(i wish) lol...thanks man... |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
I think I'm there too, lol. Good job Bel |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Though I seem a distant poet here at Passions, I just want you to know I do care about every one here. So don't despair yet. this poem however is good. Inspiration by music is fantastic(i use it)and can help you with a line if you get stuck. SeanD. "This is cactus land!!!"-T.S.Eliot |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
You know how I feel about all your pains and sorrow. I just want the best for you.....so try to smile....try to see the light behind the dark. I'm here if ya need me.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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