navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #4 » crawling
Teen Poetry #4
Post A Reply Post New Topic crawling Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Ina
Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2001-06-11 09:43 AM


"crawling in my skin. these wounds will not heal. fear is how i fall. confusing what is real."  Another poem inspired by music. "crawling" by linkin park.


CRAWLING

The impending peril
that is my life
there is something slithering
through out my mind
where does my reality begin
where does my fantasy end?
prognosticating my futur
"these wounds not heal"
can you help me through
this fear
predestined to a tragic end
everything is closing in
my  world is falling to pieces
my body wrapped in a potato sack
to ashamed of what I look like
ashamed of who I am
"crawling in my skin"
theres a pain taking over my mind
frenzied thoughts take over
I can feel the adrenaline pumping
through my viens
where is my confidence?
It was stripped away
by an uncaring human
"fear is how I fall."
This phobia become real
falling away from reality
slipping away into darkness.
The innocence is gone
"confusing what is real."
The pain is gone
the light is gone
the insecurity is back
paralyzing my body

Regina


© Copyright 2001 Regina Levy - All Rights Reserved
Acies
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665
Twilight Zone
1 posted 2001-06-11 10:01 AM


Ina --- I see a lot of pain in all your poems.  But I do disagree with some of your thoughts.  People do care and you should realize that.  All you need to do is open up to them and show them that you are willing for them to care for you.  At least you need to help yourself first before others can.  Hope things get better for you. ~*hugs*~

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic

Marshalzu
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681
Lurking
2 posted 2001-06-11 10:15 AM


Wow I really enjoyed reading your work well done and thanks for the great read
Zu

the_rescue
Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316
Japan
3 posted 2001-06-11 10:38 AM


I really like the poem it was good and I agree with aquire with what said, people care about you. you just don't see it

in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over.  (SPOKEN)

keoni
Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC
4 posted 2001-06-11 01:30 PM


Regina, very good. I have read better ones, but this is still excellent. I have a different take on things so I am going to try and stand up for you Ina. I think that you know that people care, that's not what your talking about, it's the people in your life that matter most not seeming to care. That's my take, or maybe that's just my life. In my opinion, A million people could care about you but if the one person who you want to care about you doesn't, then nothing else seems to matter.Maybe I'm dead wrong or just smoking something but that is my take. Sorry for rambling.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

SEA
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 5 Tours
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676
with you
5 posted 2001-06-11 04:00 PM


very thought provoking for me....good write  
anonymous albert ?
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979

6 posted 2001-06-11 05:34 PM


so much pain i see in your poems lately...i really hope things are ok ...emotional poem...you expressed it well...bye Ina...

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Ina
Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada
7 posted 2001-06-11 07:52 PM


JOn your dead right.....not smoking up anything whack....(i wish) lol...thanks man...
Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

8 posted 2001-06-11 08:03 PM


I think I'm there too, lol. Good job
Bel

fozzyozzy
Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia
9 posted 2001-06-11 10:23 PM


Though I seem a distant poet here at Passions, I just want you to know I do care about every one here.  So don't despair yet.  this poem however is good.  Inspiration by music is fantastic(i use it)and can help you with a line if you get stuck.

SeanD.

"This is cactus land!!!"-T.S.Eliot

Dopey Dope
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
10 posted 2001-06-12 01:37 AM


You know how I feel about all your pains and sorrow. I just want the best for you.....so try to smile....try to see the light behind the dark. I'm here if ya need me.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #4 » crawling

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary